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List of Ayushmann Khurrana performances

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Nominator(s): ~~ CAPTAIN MEDUSAtalk 20:19, 11 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Ayushmann Khurrana is an Indian actor. Most of his films have been widely praised by critics. All criticism about the article is welcomed. ~~ CAPTAIN MEDUSAtalk 20:19, 11 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Resolved comments from ChrisTheDude (talk) 07:59, 14 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
;Comments on the lead
  • "Khurrana, first appeared" - no reason for that comma
  • "in a 2004 teen drama reality show" => "in 2004 teen drama reality show"
  • "MTV Roadies, where he won the second season of the show" => "MTV Roadies, winning the second season of the show"
  • "After winning the Roadies" => "After winning Roadies"
  • "The film deals with sperm donation and infertility,[6] film received critical acclaim" => "The film, which deals with sperm donation and infertility,[6] received critical acclaim"
  • "Khurrana's performance went on to win Filmfare Award" => "Khurrana's performance went on to win the Filmfare Award"
  • "he went to star in series" => "he went on to star in a series"
  • "and a drama Hawaizaada" => "and drama Hawaizaada"
  • "In 2015, he starred in Sharat Katariya directed-romantic" => "In 2015, he starred in the Sharat Katariya-directed romantic"
  • "His performance was widely praised by critics and audience,[18][19][20] the film emerged" => "His performance was widely praised by critics and audiences,[18][19][20] and the film emerged"
  • "In 2018, he was cast in black comedy" => "In 2018, he was cast in the black comedy"
  • "Then, Khurrana appeared in Badhaai Ho" - you already mentioned this film, so this reads very oddly
  • "In 2019, Khurrana starred in series" => "In 2019, Khurrana starred in a series"
  • "For his performance in the film, Khurrana won Filmfare Critics Award" => "For his performance in the film, Khurrana won the Filmfare Critics Award"
  • "Then, he appeared in social-comedy Bala, where Khurrana portrayed Balmukund "Bala" Shukla who suffers from premature balding" => "In the social-comedy Bala, Khurrana portrayed Balmukund "Bala" Shukla, who suffers from premature balding"
  • Start a new sentence at this point
  • Think that's it for the lead. I will look at the tables later -- ChrisTheDude (talk) 12:26, 13 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
@ChrisTheDude: All done. ~~ CAPTAIN MEDUSAtalk 12:46, 13 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Comments on the tables
  • Director column should sort on surname, not forename
  • Refs would look better centred, in my opinion
  • Ek Thi Rajkumari seems to be the only TV entry with no role listed - any reason?
  • Don't use small text in "Guest appearance (to promote IPL 3)"
  • Co-Composed should not have a capital on "composed"
  • The note for many of the discography rows is just a person's name - what does this mean?
  • Single is sometimes in italics and sometimes not (not in italics is correct)
  • "Dum Laga Ke Haisha", on the other hand, should be in italics :-)
  • Think that's it -- ChrisTheDude (talk) 20:34, 14 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
@ChrisTheDude: All done. ~~ CAPTAIN MEDUSAtalk 10:34, 15 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • In the discography table, Orrey Mon should be in quote marks. Also, the note against that one - "Upal Sengupta, features Ritabhari Chakraborty" - what does this actually mean? What was the involvement/relevance of Sengupta? -- ChrisTheDude (talk) 12:33, 16 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Comments by Dudley

  • I think it would be helpful to give his date of birth at the start.
  • "winning the second season of the show.[1] After winning Roadies," Repetition. I would delete second mention.
  • Why not a column for the composer in the discography?
  • Looks fine. Just a few quibbles. Dudley Miles (talk) 14:10, 17 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Comment

  • There's a bit of a problem with sourcing. Please check WP:ICTFSOURCES for the sources that are considered WP:RS for Indian film-related articles. Some of the sources in the article belong to Pinkvilla and Bollywood Life, which are gossip sites, and are this discouraged. Same for Buzzg, Tellychakkar, Indya.
  • The lead is way too long, and contains quite a bit of extraneous information that is better suited in his biography. Please trim. Krimuk2.0 (talk) 09:47, 30 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • Thanks for your comments. I have fixed the issues raised above. ~~ CAPTAIN MEDUSAtalk 12:09, 30 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
I've given the lead a major tweak, so the prose looks good now. Good luck! :) Krimuk2.0 (talk) 08:34, 2 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
@Krimuk2.0: Thanks! ~~ CAPTAIN MEDUSAtalk 18:35, 2 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Source review – After the changes made in response to Krimuk's comment above, the source reliability and formatting now look okay. The link-checker shows no problems, so I think we can call this source review a pass. Giants2008 (Talk) 01:19, 22 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Thoughts as a drink my morning Diet Coke

  • Box Office India looks a lot like IMDB. Can you replace the uses to a better source?
  • everything else checks out for me

--Guerillero | Parlez Moi 13:08, 22 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]

@Guerillero:: I have replaced the source. Also, I prefer Dr Pepper rather than Coke. ~~ CAPTAIN MEDUSAtalk 11:25, 23 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
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