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The following is an archived discussion of a featured list nomination. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in Wikipedia talk:Featured list candidates. No further edits should be made to this page.

The list was archived by SchroCat 20:15, 28 January 2015 [1].

List of A-League hat-tricks edit

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Nominator(s): 2nyte (talk) 06:39, 30 November 2014 (UTC)[reply]

I am nominating this for featured list because it exhibits all the characteristics and contains similar information to List of Premier League hat-tricks - an existing FL. 2nyte (talk) 06:39, 30 November 2014 (UTC)[reply]

  • Comment - is there really any need to break out "The A-League, created in 2005, is the top tier of Australian league football" as a note at the bottom? The start date of 2005 is mentioned in the opening sentence anyway, and I really don't think the article would be drowning in text if the first clause was expanded to "Since the commencement of the A-League, the top tier of Australian league football, in 2005–06....." and the note removed -- ChrisTheDude (talk) 08:30, 5 December 2014 (UTC)[reply]
I reworded the opening, incorporating the note into it. Sorry for the delayed reply.--2nyte (talk) 10:27, 14 December 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Quick comments

  • Do nationalities need a flag? Can't be sure, per MOS:ICON.
  • "the top and only professional association football league" sounds naff, if it's the only then it has to be the top. Suggest a rephrase.
  • "in 2005–06," nope, that's the inaugural season.
  • "over twenty players" more than.
  • "in A-League matches" no need to repeat A-League here.
  • "by scoring three (or more) goals" why not just "scoring at least three" or "three or more"?
  • "The first was scored" ->" The first hat-trick was scored..."
  • "Five players have scored more than three goals in a match" missed where how many people have scored a hat-trick...
  • "There have been two hat-tricks scored in one match on one occasion" clumsy, e.g. "On one occasion, two hat-tricks have been scored in a single match...."
  • "only player to have scored a hat-trick after coming on as a substitute." no ref.
  • "Shane Smeltz has scored the most hat-tricks," no need to relink or repeat his first name. Apply to others.
  • "a record 4 " four.
  • Check refs for WP:DASH violations, e.g. ref 32.
  • Make sure works are properly formatted, e.g. refs 11, 28 should have The Sydney Morning Herald.

The Rambling Man (talk) 22:25, 20 December 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Still need to fix the refs, not sure what to do to fix WP:DASH violations. Regarding flags for nationalities, not sure if I should remove them. Also, the opening line reads "the top and only professional association football league".--2nyte (talk) 00:52, 21 December 2014 (UTC)[reply]
Replace hyphens with en-dashes per WP:DASH. The MOS would say that we don't need flags if they're unnecessary, i.e. they over-emphasise nationality. As for the "top and only" it depends how you read it, hence the confusion. Is it "top and only" (i.e. a singular league) or is it "top, and the only professional"...? The Rambling Man (talk) 20:30, 21 December 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Comments I loved this list. It has good information, an appropriate style, and media.

  • Ref 24 redirects away from the intended piece. 21 is dead.
  • The last line in the first paragraph (Besart Berisha's fastest) looks like it might be better somewhere in the second. The first paragraph is primarily about the number of goals scored while the second looks like other interesting tidbits.
  • I'm under the impression that alt text is no longer required but it is cool if you feel like it
  • The images seem just a little cluttered on my screen. Removing one should be considered but I'll leave it up to you to decide if it would hurt more than it does good. Would using the upright option help? See the tutorial [here https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Wikipedia:Picture_tutorial#Upright_images].
  • Is the external link necessary? Maybe under WP:ELMAYBE #4. I'll also differ to your judgement on this.

Cptnono (talk) 22:48, 27 December 2014 (UTC)[reply]

 Done--2nyte (talk) 08:32, 29 December 2014 (UTC)[reply]
Nice work. Happy to support Cptnono (talk) 09:57, 9 January 2015 (UTC)[reply]
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