Wikipedia:Featured list candidates/Henry Draper Medal/archive1

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The list was not promoted by Dabomb87 04:13, 20 July 2011 [1].

Henry Draper Medal edit

Featured list candidates/Henry Draper Medal/archive1

Nominator(s): — Kai Ojima 08:45, 28 May 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Hi, this is my first featured list candidate, and I am nominating it because I believe it meets the featured list criteria, and is a highly notable subject. It contains highly detailed information on the medal, its purpose, its establishment and, of course, its recipients. All comments are appreciated! :-) — Kai Ojima 08:45, 28 May 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Resolved comments from Giants2008 (27 and counting) 18:22, 10 June 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Comments –

The quotations in the lead and photo caption should be cited. Usually citations aren't needed in the lead if things are backed up in the table, but for quotes they should be cited every time.
Would be nice to add the year Neil Gehrels won the medal to the lead.
Charles Greeley Abbot: The quotation here has a quote inside of the quote in "constant". Per MOS:QUOTE, this word should have one quotation mark on each side instead of two. Even if it's given that way, a reasonable allowance is allowed for style modifications.
Alfred Fowler: This has a double hyphen that would be better suited as an unspaced em dash. Again, such minor style changes are allowed in quotes. Giants2008 (27 and counting) 19:20, 3 June 2011 (UTC)[reply]

A large portion of the lead consists of quotations. I wish the number could be lowered somewhat so that I'm not merely reading quotes in the lead.

Hello, and thank you for the feedback. I believe that all points except for the second are now fixed. What would you like to see there in place of quotations? Thanks, — Kai Ojima 19:02, 9 June 2011 (UTC)[reply]

How about giving the main reasons these people won the award in your own writing, based on the information in the quotes? The lead would be more engaging if this were done. Giants2008 (27 and counting) 18:22, 10 June 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Comments I like these kind of lists, nice to see them here.

Consider using the {{infobox award}} template. If you do this, you could then include images of recipients down the side of the table.
Per Giants, take a look at Crafoord Prize when it was considered featured-worthy here. I synopsised the reason for the award in each case.
You quote NASA's citation for Nehrels, but is that really what you should be using if the award citation is actually by the Draper Fund?
The second para of the lead is just a repeat of the table pretty much verbatim, I think Giants is right here, we need a re-write.
Ref 2 needs an en-dash.
A to Z of scientists in space and astronomy is used more than twice so you should make it a general reference and then just refer to the author and page numbers.
Ref 35 needs an en-dash.

The Rambling Man (talk) 16:49, 13 June 2011 (UTC)[reply]

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