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Dimple Kapadia filmography

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Nominator(s): Shahid • Talk2me 00:23, 24 November 2020 (UTC)[reply]

I am nominating this for featured list because I think it meets the criteria. A well-known Indian film actress who was recently seen in Christopher Nolan's Tenet. People might not know but she has quite a career behind her, and here it is. Shahid • Talk2me 00:23, 24 November 2020 (UTC)[reply]

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  • "She was launched by Raj Kapoor at age 14" - not keen on this wording, maybe change "launched" to "discovered"
  • "Kapadia retired from acting following her marriage to Indian actor Rajesh Khanna earlier in the same year" - not 100% clear (to me at least) which year is being referred to (I had to look at her own article to see when she actually got married), so I would change to "earlier in 1973"
  • "The early roles she played since her return" => "The early roles she played following her return"
  • In the table, characters with a surname should sort based on that
  • Think that's it from me - good work! -- ChrisTheDude (talk) 08:22, 24 November 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Comments
  • Add alt text for the image.
  • If possible, please add any recent image of Kapadia.
  • "Her role as a Christian teenager from Goa established her as a youth fashion icon and her performance won her the Filmfare Award for Best Actress." It's clear that the role earned her that Filmfare. So why not remove the "her performance" bit from the sentence?
  • At ref 13, NDTV.com --> NDTV

That's it. Yashthepunisher (talk) 16:04, 26 November 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Comments
  • In the table section: Feroz Khan, and Abhishek Sharma need to be linked to the correct page.
  • In both films she played women → In both films, she
  • specially → especially
  • Are any better lead images? Headshots
  • Per this, table captions should be included using Template:Sronly, for example, |+ {{sronly|Example table caption}}
Comments by MSG17
  • Pati Parmeshwar is linked to the concept instead of the film.
  • Next, Pyar Ke Naam Qurbaan is out of order if the date of 1989 is correct, as it is sandwiched between two 1990 films. However, the article states that the film was actually released in early 1990. Please resolve this discrepancy.
  • The articles for sources should be linked consistently. For example, Bollywood Hungama should be linked in all citations that use it.
  • For Bumiller's citation, it doesn't make sense to link one page when you have cited multiple pages from the work. Remove that from the original citation in the bibliography and, if possible, link page 186 in the sfn ref to maintain consistency.

Overall, I have to say you've done a great job with this. I didn't know about her career's trajectory (or that she appeared in Tenet) and found this to be a rather interesting dive into that. Thanks for all the work you've put in. MSG17 (talk) 00:00, 28 November 2020 (UTC)[reply]

  • @MSG17: Thanks a lot for your comments, and I'm glad you find this interesting. I've applied all your comments, fixed the links and the technicality. Since linking all publishers in citations is not obligatory per MOS:DL, I kept just the first link for each publication. As for the Bumiller work, I've removed the link from the sfn to make it consistent with the other sources. Shahid • Talk2me 01:03, 28 November 2020 (UTC)[reply]
    • Great! I fixed the page thing on the root citation myself. Although publication links do have to be repeated for sortable table entries (as you don't know what order the user will see them in), you have already linked all that were used multiple times in the lead, so I withdraw that objection. Support MSG17 (talk) 01:19, 28 November 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Comments from Aoba47

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  • To start on somewhat superficial note, I like the image selected for the lead. There is something visually pleasing about the composition to me, and I think it shows more personality than a closer head-shot. For the image caption, would it be possible to add the location/event the photograph was taken as it would be helpful to provide further context rather than just the year?
  • For this part, who assigned her the title role in his teen romance, I am uncertain about the "assigned" word choice. I more so associated that word with a school assignment rather than a job. Maybe something like "hired" would be better in this context?
  • For this part, following her separation from Khanna, I would replace "following" with something like "after" since you use "following" in a previous part of the same sentence.
  • I would link professional mourner to help with readers who are not familiar with the concept.
  • I am uncertain about using "the latter" in this part, the latter of which, since I have only seen it used for lists of two items and not for more than that.
  • For this part, was cast by Christopher Nolan in his action thriller Tenet, do you mean that Nolan himself handpicked her for the film? If so, it needs a citation to support. If not, then I think it would be more helpful to the reader to replace this part with something about her character in the film as done in previous parts of the lead.
  • I do not think the semi-colon in the table are used correctly. I would instead use a comma to say Voice, animated film.

Since this FLC has already received a substantial amount of commentary (and support) from experienced reviewers, my comments are mostly nit-picks. Once my comments are addressed, I will be more than happy to support this. You've done a wonderful job with the prose as this is one of the few Wikipedia filmographies that actually makes me want to check out some of her films. If possible, I would greatly appreciate any feedback on my current FAC? It is about a completely different topic (being about music rather than film), but I always appreciate getting an outsider's perspective to insure that the article can be understood by unfamiliar readers. Either way, have a great rest of your weekend! Aoba47 (talk) 21:16, 29 November 2020 (UTC)[reply]

@Aoba47: Hi there, thank you for your comments. I've addressed all your comments, "assigned" was changed to "gave" because "hired" makes less sense in this context, in my opinion. Other than that, all applied, source added where asked. Will read the Candy article, interesting. Shahid • Talk2me 10:14, 30 November 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • Source review – Source reliability seems okay throughout, and the link-checker shows no problems. One small formatting issue should be taken care of: the Simha book needs an en dash for the year range in its title. Giants2008 (Talk) 23:42, 12 December 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Promoting. --PresN 20:34, 16 December 2020 (UTC)[reply]

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