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The list was promoted by Scorpion0422 18:03, 22 October 2008 (UTC).[reply]

Avatar: The Last Airbender (season 1) edit

previous FLC (20:02, 8 September 2008)

Well, I've waited around a month since the last FLC, given it several lookovers and I can't find anything else wrong. So, here is is again :) NuclearWarfare contact meMy work 02:05, 6 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Comments

  • Current ref 5 is lacking a publisher
 Done NuclearWarfare contact meMy work 18:48, 6 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Otherwise sources look good, links checked out with the link checker tool. Ealdgyth - Talk 12:41, 6 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Comments

  • Are there any negative reviews at all?
We couldn't seem to find any, even last time around. NuclearWarfare contact meMy work 21:37, 15 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • Since the Pulcinella Awards do not have an article, you should explain what it is they honour
 Done NuclearWarfare contact meMy work 21:37, 15 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]
 Done NuclearWarfare contact meMy work 21:37, 15 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • Each episode only has one director, so the (s) doesn't need to be there in the header
 Done NuclearWarfare contact meMy work 21:37, 15 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • Why "Information obtained from TVShowsOnDVD.com on September 6, 2008." and "Information obtained from Amazon.com on August 06, 2008."? Just use the reference
I, uh, dunno.  Doing... NuclearWarfare contact meMy work 21:38, 15 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]
 Done NuclearWarfare contact meMy work 21:44, 15 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • Some ref formatting is needed. Websites shouldn't be italicised. For example, Ref [1]: ""Avatar Sneak Peak". Nick.com. Nickelodeon. Retrieved on 2008-05-29." you can remove "Nick.com" completely and keep "Nickelodeon" as the publisher. You should link them when they have articles, too
 Done. I think? NuclearWarfare contact meMy work 21:44, 15 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • Same with "Amazon.co.uk. Amazon.com, Inc." Remove "Amazon.co.uk"

Matthewedwards (talk • contribs • email) 16:11, 15 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]

 Done NuclearWarfare contact meMy work 21:44, 15 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Comments
Resolved comments from Gary King (talk) 04:15, 20 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • Unless the season is officially titled "Season One", don't refer to it as such. It is misleading. Just call it the "first season" and "this season", etc. but not "Season One".
I dunno about this, but I changed it to: "The first season (Book One: Water) of Avatar: The Last Airbender..." NuclearWarfare contact meMy work 21:46, 15 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Later changed to "Season One (Book One: Water)"
  • "best animated television series" – is this an official title? If so, then capitalize the words. If not, then is it just original research?
 Done NuclearWarfare contact meMy work 21:47, 15 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Gary King (talk) 17:17, 15 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Comments
  • "Pole, attempting" – "Pole and attempt"
They are going to the North Pole to find a teacher who lives there, so I think it is good at present. NuclearWarfare contact meMy work 22:04, 19 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]
"attempting" is not a verb; it is a noun. "attempting to find a Waterbending master to teach Aang and Katara" has no verb. Gary King (talk) 01:44, 20 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]
It can be either. In this particular case, it is a verb meaning "to try." *SIGN* 03:01, 20 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • "In the 2005 Pulcinella Awards, which gives awards for excellence in animation, Season One won "Best TV Series"." – "Season One won "Best TV Series" at the 2005 Pulcinella Awards, which gives awards for excellence in animation."
 Done NuclearWarfare contact meMy work 22:09, 19 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • "In addition to awards, it attracted more than a million viewers each time the network aired a new episode, and earned the title of "Best Animated Television Series" in the boys 9–14 year old demographic." – a generally confusing sentence. How is awards related to how many viewers the season has had? "It" should probably be changed to "Season One" so that it does not seem like it's implying the "Pulcinella Awards". It should probably be reworded to something like "each episode had more than a million viewers"
Reworded to "Each episode of Season One attracted more than a million viewers each time the network aired a new episode.Season One won "Best TV Series" and "Best Animated Television Series" in the boys 9-14 year old [[demographic]] at the 2005 Pulcinella Awards, which gives awards for excellence in animation.<ref name="Pulcinella" />" NuclearWarfare contact meMy work 22:09, 19 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Gary King (talk) 00:22, 19 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Support, all issues resolved. Dabomb87 (talk) 01:48, 22 October 2008 (UTC) [reply]
Resolved issues, Dabomb87 (talk)

Comments from Dabomb87 (talk · contribs)

  • "Season One (Book One: Water) of Avatar: The Last Airbender, an American animated television series on Nickelodeon, began airing on February 21, 2005, and ended on December 2, 2005, with twenty episodes aired." How about: "Season One (Book One: Water) of Avatar: The Last Airbender, an American animated television series on Nickelodeon, aired 20 episodes from February 21, 2005 to December 2, 2005."
I like it. (yours, not the one that was in the article) *SIGN* 03:01, 20 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • "The series was created by Michael Dante DiMartino and Bryan Konietzko[3]" Inline citation needs to be outside punctuation.
 Done *SIGN* 03:01, 20 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • "The season focuses on the protagonist, Aang, and his friends Katara and Sokka as they journey to the North Pole, attempting to find a Waterbending master to teach Aang and Katara." Delete the comma as well.
 Done Makes sense, especially seeing the contention over it.*SIGN* 03:01, 20 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • "boys 9-14 year old" En dash instead of hyphen.
 Done *SIGN* 03:01, 20 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • "Zach Tyler Eisen and Mae Whitman provided the voices of protagonists Aang and Katara, while Jack DeSena was Sokka's voice." "while"-->and, it is additive information.
What about "with"? *SIGN* 03:01, 20 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]
How would that work? Write how you would phrase the sentence. Dabomb87 (talk) 03:24, 20 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]
"Zach Tyler Eisen and Mae Whitman provided the voices of protagonists Aang and Katara, with Jack DeSena as Sokka's voice." Or something very similar. *SIGN* 03:33, 20 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Sure. Dabomb87 (talk) 03:37, 20 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • "Dante Basco and Mako starred as antagonists Zuko and Iroh,[3] though their role in the show would begin to change near the end of the season."
 Done *SIGN* 03:01, 20 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • "9–14-year old" Why does this instance have a hyphen but the previous example of this phrase didn't?
Dunno, which is the correct one? *SIGN* 03:01, 20 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Will look this up tomorrow. Dabomb87 (talk) 03:24, 20 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]
From what I've seen, use the hyphenated version.
Don't they both have hyphens? *SIGN* 23:27, 21 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]
I was referring to the one above this. Dabomb87 (talk) 00:35, 22 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]
 Done NuclearWarfare contact meMy work 00:48, 22 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • "as well as attracting many age and gender grops in its pool of 1.1 million viewers who watch each new episode.-->and has attracted many age and gender groups in its pool of 1.1 million viewers of each new episode.
 Done *SIGN* 23:27, 21 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • "a race of people that were believed to have been deceased for 100 years." For 100 years or 100 years ago?
 Done *SIGN* 23:27, 21 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • "Meanwhile, Zuko, banished Prince of the Fire Nation," Needs a the before "banished".
 Done *SIGN* 23:27, 21 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • "is patrolling the seas looking for the Avatar"-->is patrolling the seas in search of the Avatar.
 Done *SIGN* 23:27, 21 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • "who ban any sort of Earthbending"-->which bans any sort of Earthbending.
Isn't "who" the proper term here? Because people banned earthbending... *SIGN* 23:27, 21 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Well, "Fire Nation" is not a person. Dabomb87 (talk) 00:35, 22 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]
 Done NuclearWarfare contact meMy work 00:50, 22 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • "Aang has to travel to the Fire Temple in order to receive the message from Avatar Roku on the Winter Solstice.
 Done *SIGN* 23:27, 21 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • "When Aang leaves the sanctuary, he is attacked by Zhao and the Sages, who are all defeated when Aang manifests the spirit of Roku, who destroys the temple." Repetition of "who".
 Done *SIGN* 23:27, 21 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • "Aang sets off to a nearby herbalist institute in hopes of finding a cure for his friends." "sets off"-->goes.
 Done *SIGN* 23:27, 21 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • "Katara, Aang and Sokka to go into a village who relies solely on the predictions of a fortuneteller."-->Katara, Aang and Sokka go into a village that relies solely on the predictions of a fortuneteller.
 Done *SIGN* 23:27, 21 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • "Sokka, Aang and Katara locate a seemingly abandoned Water Tribe fleet ship" locate-->find.
 Done *SIGN* 23:27, 21 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • "The protagnonists travel into a Fire Nation town which is hosting a festival of Fire Nation culture. " Comma after town.
 Done *SIGN* 23:27, 21 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • "More importantly, he is a firebending master not with the Firelord." Means?
 Done *SIGN* 23:27, 21 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • "A storyteller tells the gang of "air walkers" at the Northern Air Temple." Tells what?
 Done *SIGN* 23:27, 21 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • "Unfortunately, the Fire Nation manages to recover the invention, a war balloon." "Unfortunately"-->However.
 Done *SIGN* 23:27, 21 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • "After the journey to the Northern Air Temple, the group lurk"—lurks.
 Done *SIGN* 23:27, 21 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • "Each DVD, with only one exception"
 Done *SIGN* 23:27, 21 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • "In the United States, all Season One DVDs were encoded using NTSC. Since this is not compatible in most countries outside North America, Nickelodeon had a separate release for each DVD, where the video would be encoded using PAL instead. These releases began on February 19, 2007, with each DVD release occurring months after the original release. As with the original DVDs, each set contained four episodes on one disc, with the exception would be The Complete Book One Collection Box Set, which contained all of the twenty episodes in the season on five discs." Rewrite:

In the United States, all Season One DVDs were encoded using the NTSC (film?) standard. Since this standard is not compatible in most countries outside North America, Nickelodeon released separate DVDs in regions where the video would be encoded using PAL instead. These releases began on February 19, 2007; each DVD release occurred months after the original release. As with the original DVDs, each set contained four episodes on one disc, except for The Complete Book One Collection Box Set, which contained all of the twenty episodes in the season on five discs.

NTSC is not standard. I have incorporated the other changes though. *SIGN* 23:27, 21 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Dabomb87 (talk) 13:04, 21 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]
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