Wikipedia:Featured article review/Miles Davis/archive1

Article is no longer a featured article

Review commentary

edit
Messages left at Wikipedia:WikiProject Biography/to do, Wikipedia talk:WikiProject Jazz, Wikipedia talk:WikiProject Missouri, Wikipedia talk:WikiProject Composers and Wikipedia talk:WikiProject Albums. Sandy 19:57, 16 September 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Promoted in brilliant prose days. No inline citations. Not brilliantly written. The article seems short for this subject. Pipes years in music contrary to the guideline at WP:ALBUM. Doesn't exemplify Wikipedia's very best work. Punctured Bicycle 02:51, 16 September 2006 (UTC)[reply]

  • Comment - Needs inline citations (1.c.). Also, it fails to discuss Miles Davis' legacy which means it isn't comprehensive. LuciferMorgan 10:22, 16 September 2006 (UTC)[reply]
    • I agree. It is important to discuss the legacy of such an influential and revered artist. Punctured Bicycle 18:55, 16 September 2006 (UTC)[reply]
      • I think the article does a pretty good job of going through Miles's career, it's good work. Since they decided to go YouTube, which I like, I am going to supplement it chronologically with three added videos from later periods of Miles' work which are also available, and see what the authors of the article and whomever else, says. If someone wants to get into Miles' legacy, draft a section and nail it down. I, for one, hope it makes it. Thanks. Tvccs 17:03, 19 September 2006 (UTC)[reply]
  • Comment Mixes references styles, needs to be cited. Sandy 23:24, 24 September 2006 (UTC)[reply]
  • Comment Incomplete and unbalanced. The text implies that he might not even have studied at Juilliard! No mention of the grounding in music theory he learned there or how that influenced later work, neglects to mention that Birth of the Cool is widely regarded as the first example of cool jazz. Devotes inordinate space to fusion jazz, which is arguably the least important of his musical innovations. No mention of Davis's idiosyncratic playing style. Fails to reference controversial assertions such as, The period is characterized as a colorful time by Davis in his memoirs, where wealthy Caucasian women would ostensibly lavish him with sex and drugs. In reality, he had become completely dependent upon cocaine and heroin, spending nearly all of his time propped up on a couch in his apartment watching television, leaving only to score. The entire article has only one line citation. Miles Davis deserves a featured article. If my copy of his autobiography were handy I'd add line citations myself. Help this, please. Durova 16:37, 25 September 2006 (UTC)[reply]
  • Move to FARC - problems not addressed, see diff. Sandy 20:20, 29 September 2006 (UTC)[reply]

FARC commentary

edit
Suggested FA criteria concerns are writing quality (1a), comprehensiveness (1b), and lack of citations (1c). Marskell 11:00, 3 October 2006 (UTC)[reply]
  • Remove - Lacks inline citations (1. c. violation), and fails to discuss Miles Davis' legacy (1. b. violation. LuciferMorgan 19:44, 3 October 2006 (UTC)[reply]
  • Remove Has never been through FA process. Has not improved. Punctured Bicycle 04:12, 8 October 2006 (UTC)[reply]
  • Remove does not meet current criteria. --Peta 05:46, 9 October 2006 (UTC)[reply]
  • Remove. Doesn't meet FA standards, lacks citations, comprehensiveness a concern. Sandy 14:51, 10 October 2006 (UTC)[reply]
  • Remove. Per all above.--Yannismarou 08:38, 13 October 2006 (UTC)[reply]