Wikipedia:Featured article review/Medal of Honor/archive2

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The article was removed by Dana boomer 13:26, 7 May 2012 [1].

Medal of Honor edit

Review commentary edit

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I am nominating this featured article for review because it has the most cleanup tags of any featured article. Tagged with: lacking reliable references from November 2011; accuracy disputes from November 2011; dead external links from August 2011, June 2010, October 2011; unsourced statements from October 2011, November 2011, September 2011; disputed statements from November 2011; self-contradictory articles from May 2011. Someone noted problems on talkpage a month ago Tom B (talk) 16:46, 27 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Comments There are some fundamental mistakes in the article:

As there were only two medals that could be issued until World War I including the Purple Heart Wrong. The Purple Heart was not instituted until the 1930s.
HLI Lordship Industries Inc., a former Medal of Honor contractor, was fined in 1996 for selling 300 fake medals for US $75 each.[58] Wrong. The medals were real. "fake" may mean not awarded.
Quality of sources are very weak and far from "high-quality and reliable". Too many "homebrew" websites are used.
The "post-Vietnam" section is out of place considering that no other war era has its own section. Brad (talk) 03:50, 30 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]

FARC commentary edit

Featured article criteria of concern mentioned in the review section focused mainly on referencing and accuracy. Although some work has been done, the majority of the concerns remain unanswered, so I am moving this to the FAC section. Dana boomer (talk) 19:10, 11 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Delist There are major problems with 1c and to a lesser extent 2c. Brad (talk) 14:45, 23 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Twenty-five edits only since the FAR was initiated, mostly an IP editing the Video game series section, little improvement. Having said that, while there are a large number of categories of tags, there are actually very few tags in the article (they're hard to find!) Some effort should be made to find a MilHist editor willing to work on this. Notifications to templates might not be noticed, and personal pleas may be more effective. Unless someone takes this on within the week, then I will also be an unfortunate Delist, but I consider it a shame, as the article should have been able to be repaired in the month is was here. SandyGeorgia (Talk) 02:40, 26 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]

I'm gonna start working on this tonight and see if I can turn it around. I see a bunch of stuff I shoudl be able to fix and expand pretty quickly and I think that will help turn it around. --Kumioko (talk) 21:25, 31 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]

I'll help out, too where needed. Let me know where.--Mike - Μολὼν λαβέ 04:58, 2 February 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Comment - It looks like some work has been done on the article (thanks guys!), and all of the tags have now been taken care of. Can we get some comments by the above editors on how they feel the article stands right now? Thanks, Dana boomer (talk) 12:26, 17 February 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Comment, work by Mike appreciated, tags removed, but because of past concerns with Vanished User's work, I'd not like to enter a Keep without a source spot check. Where are all the MilHist folk? I'd think they'd care about this one (perhaps so many of them are non-US?) SandyGeorgia (Talk) 16:46, 29 February 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Comment, I just wanted to point out that Kumioko retired so its unlikely they will be doing any work on the article. ShmuckatellieJoe (talk) 20:21, 7 March 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Hi everyone. Just to let you all know, I'm going to put in some effort over the next few days to save this one. Hate to see it delisted after almost 8 years. I'm unfamiliar with the article and I'll need to know what, other than the tags User:Tpbradbury mentioned and what User:Brad101 said, to do to fix things up. This is my first FAR so please be patient with me! Thanks, —Ed!^(talk) 18:49, 14 March 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- Some other editors and myself have trimmed dead links, replaced links with new links and added book referenced in place of some links. I've checked every link and all of them currently link to a source. I also can't find any more accuracy disputes tagged or any sources of questional reliability. Are there any issues with the sourcing I didn't spot? —Ed!^(talk) 22:24, 14 March 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  - Nice work, sir! --Mike - Μολὼν λαβέ 23:19, 14 March 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Prod I'm still waiting to hear any feedback from others. I believe all concerns have been addressed on the page, but I'm willing to work on any additional comments. —Ed!^(talk) 17:53, 28 March 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Ed, thanks for the great work! Feel free to ping the editors who commented above (Brad, TomB, etc) and ask them to revisit their comments. Dana boomer (talk) 16:49, 29 March 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Source spot check from Spinningspark

Sources spot-checked at 10% randomly machine selected

FNs 19, 73, 82, 85 all ok. FN29 agf; google snippets refuses to verify but facts easily confirmed with a gsearch.
FN23 does not verify the two routes for nominations
FN38 is verified, but citation should be expanded, the abbreviation is quite obscure. An online link would help also.
FN71 "numerically superior force" is not verified.
FN88 Source confirms facts but I don't think that the view of one source can ("...wall of government bureaucracy and prejudice towards minorities...") can be translated to "...many believe to have been overlooked because of his religion". Also president G. W. Bush is not named in hte source. It can be deduced that Bush awarded the medal from the date and the fact that this is normally the president that carries this out but I don't think that is really good enough, it needs a direct cite.

Spinning Spark 01:01, 1 April 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Given that the spotcheck turned up verification problems I feel further checks are needed but I am not willing to put in the work while the ones found so far are not being worked on. Spinning Spark 09:38, 8 April 2012 (UTC)[reply]

CommentI may be able to help out on some of the Civil War and Indian Wars stuff. The history section of the article is especially weak, IMO. This is also my first voyage into FAC territory, so please be patient with me.Intothatdarkness (talk) 15:35, 20 April 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Delist. Lots of issues, some of which don't even require a careful read-through:

Lots of one- and two-sentence paragraphs, including some in the lead. These should be expanded, merged, or deleted.
The article is not well-organized. Many of the sections contain information about both the present and the past. Appearance, for example, describes not only the current appearance of the medal, but also the historical designs. If there is historical information throughout the entire article, then why is there a History section at all? Conversely, if there must be a History section, why is there so much historical information presented elsewhere? One symptom of this poor organization is the existence of redundant information: "The only female Medal of Honor recipient is Mary Edwards Walker, a Civil War surgeon. Her medal was rescinded in 1917 along with many other non-combat awards, but it was restored by President Jimmy Carter in 1977 (see Evolution of Criteria, above)".
The quality of the prose is severely lacking in some places:
- "A ribbon bar that is the same shade of light blue as the neckband, and includes five white stars, pointed upwards, in the shape of an "M" is worn for situations other than full dress uniform." The subject of the sentence is "A ribbon bar", and the predicate is "is worn...", which appears 24 words later. The meaning is lost due to all the extraneous details.
- "Many Medals of Honor awarded in the 19th century were associated with saving the flag..." Saving from what? Does "saving" mean the same thing as "protecting" in this context? Or does it mean "rescuing"?
- "There were two awards of the Tiffany Cross Medal of Honor for non-combat to Commander, later Rear Admiral Richard Byrd and Floyd Bennett" Very confusing wording. Did they each receive the medal twice, or did they each receive it once? Why is Byrd's rank mentioned but not Bennett's? Or were they both Commanders?
- "On November 11, 1921, the U.S. Unknown Soldier was reciprocally awarded the Victoria Cross, the British military's highest award for valor." So he was awarded ${}^{\frac {1}{\text{Victoria Cross}}}$ ? Also, why is this relevant?

-- Cryptic C62 · Talk 18:17, 2 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]

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