Wikipedia:Featured article review/End times/archive1

Review commentary

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Message left at Religion and Christianity. Sandy (Talk) 16:20, 28 October 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Brilliant prose promotion, no original author. This article is poorly referenced, has an inadequate lead, does not conform to WP:LAYOUT, is poorly arranged with large chunks of white text, has a factual accuracy tag, has short choppy sections, is extremely listy, and has external jumps. Sandy (Talk) 16:20, 28 October 2006 (UTC)[reply]

  • Not happy with the prose at the clause level. "has evolved from use around a group of beliefs"—what does it mean? Deictics are missing in quite a few places, e.g., "has ensued following publication of"—THE publication of. Needs a good run-through. Tony 00:52, 30 October 2006 (UTC)[reply]

FARC commentary

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Suggested FA criteria concerns are referencing, LEAD, NPOV, section layout and prose. Joelito (talk) 14:21, 13 November 2006 (UTC)[reply]