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Bath

Review commentary

Messages left at OldakQuill, UK notice board, Cities, Geography and UK geography. Sandy (Talk) 19:04, 15 November 2006 (UTC)

This FA has several problems.

• As with most nominations here, it lacks inline citations. The article is 45k long and has only 7/8 footnotes.
• Fair use rationale missing (and possibly an incorrect tag) on Image:Coat of Arms - City of Bath.jpg. Other images not checked.
• Very thin lead for such a long article.
• Poorly written: see e.g. first sentence of the Politics section
• Degenerates into a list in the Bath in arts section
• Horrible layout, too many headers, stubby sections, lists
• Possibly excessive external links section.

--kingboyk 11:33, 13 November 2006 (UTC)

• Comment Insufficient inline cites. LuciferMorgan 16:03, 13 November 2006 (UTC)
• Comment. Per LuciferMorgan, plus other issues: some section have tiny paras that need to be merged or expanded and there are stub-sections(like 'The Spa'). Lots of red links, but I don't consider that issue a criteria for objection/removal personally - but it would be nice if somebody would do some stubs.-- _{Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus | talk}  17:22, 22 November 2006 (UTC)

FARC commentary

Suggested FA criteria are citations, images, LEAD, layout, and prose. Joelito (talk) 00:29, 29 November 2006 (UTC)

• Remove Insufficient inline cites. LuciferMorgan 00:19, 5 December 2006 (UTC)
• Remove as per Lucifer, and 1a and 2a. The lead is too short and represents a clumsy attempt to summarise the article. The prose is poorly written.

"Bath is a city in South West England most famous for its baths fed by three hot springs. It is situated 159 km (99 miles) west of central London and 21 km (13 miles) southeast of Bristol.

The city is founded around the only naturally-occurring hot springs in the United Kingdom. It was first documented as a Roman spa, although tradition suggests that it was founded earlier. The waters from its spring were believed to be a cure for many afflictions. From Elizabethan to Georgian times it was a resort city for the wealthy. As a result of its popularity during the latter period, the city contains many fine examples of Georgian architecture, most notably the Royal Crescent. The city has a population of over 80,000 and is a World Heritage Site."

• • The opening sentence is stilted. Try: "most famous for its baths, which are fed by three hot springs." Are they underground springs? Thermal rather than hot?
  • Founded earlier? No reference, which would be OK if this point were referenced in the History section; but it's not even mentioned.
  • As a result of its popularity there is great architecture in the city? Fuzzy. Buildings arise from wealth.
  • No hyphen after -ly, please.

This deserves a prompt demotion. Tony 11:58, 7 December 2006 (UTC)

• Remove. Inadequately cited, prose issues, poor image placement, external jumps, short stubby sections and paragraphs, mixed reference styles, and no one working on any of it. Sandy (Talk) 00:38, 11 December 2006 (UTC)

• Remove as per everything above- --RelHistBuff 11:01, 11 December 2006 (UTC)
• Remove per Sandy.--Aldux 14:11, 11 December 2006 (UTC)