Wikipedia:Featured article candidates/The Harbingers/archive1

The following is an archived discussion of a featured article nomination. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in Wikipedia talk:Featured article candidates. No further edits should be made to this page.

The article was not promoted by SandyGeorgia 01:36, 2 August 2010 [1].

The Harbingers edit

Nominator(s): d'oh! _talk 14:58, 1 August 2010 (UTC)[reply]

I am nominating this for featured article because I feel it meets the FA criteria. I been working on this article for a while, and after going through a peer view I believe it is ready for FA nomination. d'oh! _talk 14:58, 1 August 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Oppose, suggest withdrawal—poor grammar throughout; for example, "The video included with the game was criticise as events in the video can be memorise by players when played multiply times, this can reduce the ongoing playability of the game". The article is also based largely on a primary source (which may be unavoidable). I think it should receive a thorough copyedit before it can be brought to FAC again. Ucucha 15:10, 1 August 2010 (UTC)[reply]

I gave the article a look over to fix any bad grammar, but I had some bad luck trying to get the article copyedited from other editors, with most too busy to help out. Also it was my understanding that a primary source can be used to provide a description of the plot. In any other cases another source was used. I hope I have addressed your concerns. d'oh! _talk 17:36, 1 August 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Oppose: While I sympathise with your difficulty in recruiting a copyeditor, articles should not be brought to FAC with the prose in this state. If you withdraw it now, I will copyedit it within one week. This will by no means guarantee the article a successful passage at its next FAC, but at least it will read more smoothly. Please note that this offer does depend on a quick withdrawal. Ping my talkpage if interested. Brianboulton (talk) 18:39, 1 August 2010 (UTC)[reply]
Oppose. Sorry about this, but the article starts "Before starting the game it is recommend that…", and is full of niggling inconsistencies (a mix of footnotes before and after punctuation, for instance). The illustration of a pizza "to show how the Provinces come together to create the game board" could probably safely go, too. – iride scent 19:23, 1 August 2010 (UTC)[reply]

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