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The following is an archived discussion of a featured article nomination. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in Wikipedia talk:Featured article candidates. No further edits should be made to this page.

The article was not promoted by Raul654 20:07, 2 April 2009 [1].

Terri Schiavo case edit

This article went through several FAN's in 2005 but never made it. It has since been renamed from Terri Schiavo to shift the focus more towards the historic legal case, not the person, and the amount BLP-ish information has been reduced. The prose of the lead section back then suffered from a vagueness that has been overcome with the move away from BLP. The article has just had a terse but constructive peer review and the issues raised have been addressed. Please note that all FAN's and PR's were under the old name, but naturally, the ArticleHistory template on the talk page is comprehensive. The previous FAN is here.--Lagelspeil (talk) 16:58, 1 April 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Wow,I remember when this happened, especially that the disconnection from life supported happened on my fourteenth birthday. I took a look at the article a few days ago coincidentally. I have some nitpicks on the inline sourcing:
    • concerned with cognition, perception, and awareness. - Need a source.
    • Electrolyte imbalance can be caused by losing fluids. Her medical chart contained a note that "she apparently has been trying to keep her weight down with dieting by herself, drinking liquids most of the time during the day and drinking about 10–15 glasses of iced tea." Iced tea is a mild diuretic; that is, it is a food that causes fluid loss. However, the low potassium could have been a spurious result caused by the intravascular administration of fluids during the attempt to resuscitate her. It is unclear whether she was bulimic. - Need a source.
    • Schiavo remained comatose for two and a half months. When she emerged from the coma, Schiavo regained a sleep-wake cycle, but did not exhibit repeatable and consistent awareness of herself or environment. While initially fed by means of a nasogastric feeding tube, she eventually received a percutaneous endoscopic gastrostomy (PEG) feeding tube—inserted through the abdominal wall. - Need a source.
    • where she received neurological testing and regular speech and occupational therapy until 1994. - Need a source?
    • Schiavo's husband trained and became a respiratory therapist and emergency room nurse. In 2004, he was hired as a nursing supervisor at the Pinellas County Jail in Florida. - need a source.
    • From 1998 to the end of 2002, the Schindlers were locked in a struggle in the courts, first to decide if Schiavo should be removed from life support and then the appeals by her parents to block this determination. This legal struggle received no significant publicity. This phase started with her husband's initial petition to have the feeding tube removed and involved four legal decisions of note. Michael did not directly make the ultimate decision about whether Terri should live or die: he petitioned the court, asking it to act as Terri's surrogate and determine what she would decide to do if she were able. The court determined that Terri would not wish to continue life-prolonging measures. While Michael remained interested and visible in the proceedings, he had conceded control to the court and the Schindlers now faced the decision of the court. In many ways, the legal status at the end of these five years was the same as immediately after these initial court decisions, but up until the end of this time, the story had received little coverage in the media, and thus it was still a family affair. During this time, some legal discovery occurred as to Terri's medical situation, but, none of that new information had much bearing on the legal case since her PVS diagnosis was the decisive element. - need a source.
    • (2nd DCA) and came to be known by the court as Schiavo I in its later rulings. - Quick source needed.
    • care and treatment for Terri. The Schindlers further suggested that he was wasting the assets within the guardianship account by transferring Schiavo to Pinellas Park, Florida hospice "after it was clear that she was not 'terminal' within Medicare guidelines" for hospices. By this time, while still legally married to Terri Schiavo, Michael was in a relationship with Jodi Centonze, and had fathered their first child. Michael denied wrongdoing, stating that the Schindlers had actively encouraged him to "get on with his life" and date since 1991. Michael said he chose not to divorce his wife and relinquish guardianship because he wanted to ensure her final wishes (not to be kept alive in a PVS) were carried out. The court denied the motion to remove the guardian, allowing that the evidence was not sufficient and in some instances, not relevant. It set April 24, 2001 as the date on which the tube was to be removed. - needs sources.
    • "2.5 Schiavo III & IV: PVS diagnosis challenge" - needs sources in the entire section.
    • The Schindlers' other attorney, Pat Anderson, was concurrently challenging Michael Schiavo's right to be her guardian, and, on June 16, she made a petition for writ of Quo Warranto, a pleading that asks "by what right" someone acts in an official capacity. - Needs a source
    • It is contempt of Congress to prevent or discourage congressional witnesses from testifying. The purpose of the subpoenas was thus to postpone the feeding tube removal. - source?
    • Although Senate Majority Leader Bill Frist, Senator Rick Santorum, and House Majority Leader Tom DeLay brought the possibility of sanctioning Greer on charges of contempt of Congress, Congress did not attempt to enforce the subpoenas or take any action against Greer. - Source?
    • Sections 4.3, 5 and 6 need better inlines.
As a favor, I won't oppose you, I'll just leave them as comments, but I suggest you fix up the sourcing fast.HurricaneCraze32 :  Chat  April Fools! 10:24, 2 April 2009 (UTC)[reply]
Thanks for the feedback. I have incorporated most of it into the article. I will attempt to make section 6 "Public opinion and activism" a bit more terse. It has always been a problem child for this article.--Lagelspeil (talk) 13:19, 2 April 2009 (UTC)[reply]
As a side note, the prose is also very choppy due to the number of short short paragraphs. Ealdgyth - Talk 13:33, 2 April 2009 (UTC)[reply]
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