Wikipedia:Featured article candidates/Shahid Kapoor/archive1

The following is an archived discussion of a featured article nomination. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in Wikipedia talk:Featured article candidates. No further edits should be made to this page.

The article was archived by Laser brain via FACBot (talk) 11:56, 26 April 2016 [1].

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Shahid Kapoor

Nominator(s): Krimuk|90 (talk) 05:23, 7 March 2016 (UTC)

Having successfully written the FA-class biographies of 4 leading actresses of Hindi cinema, this is my first attempt to write about an actor. I believe, as with the previous articles, this one meets the FA-criteria. But of course, constructive comments from established editors will only help improve the article, and I expect plenty of those. Cheers! Krimuk|90 (talk) 05:23, 7 March 2016 (UTC)

Early life

• Do we know the name of the Russian magazine?
• "He subsequently appeared in other television commercials," -examples?
• "He subsequently appeared in other television commercials, and also featured in music videos for several performers, including the band Aryans and the singer Kumar Sanu.[10] Kapoor also" -rep of "also"

♦ Dr. Blofeld 10:40, 16 March 2016 (UTC)

Early work

• "Writing for The Hindu, the critic Ziya Us Salam did not find him to be "hero material", writing" -rep of "writing"
• You've linked sleeper hit but didn't in the lede. I'd link in lede too.
• "Patcy N of Rediff.com praised his dancing skills but was wary of his imitation of Shah Rukh Khan's acting style: "He does it well in some scenes, overdoes it in others."" -the explanation and quote is a little redundant
• "In a review for the former, Namrata Joshi of Outlook termed Kapoor "colourless" and criticised his pairing with Rimi Sen" -means little if you don't explain what role/s he played and what the films were about

Breakthrough

• "a whodunit " -a bit informal isn't it?
• " Kapoor played one of the seven suspects in the murder of an heiress, and in the Priyadarshan-directed Chup Chup Ke, he played " -rep of "played"
• "He also worked on creating a different physique for the two brothers, a process that took him a year to accomplish." -a bit vague, I gather one buff, the other a skinny weed? Some elaboration on weight loss/gain and the physiques might help.

2013

• "Kapoor suffered an accident during the filming of R... Rajkumar when a chemical spilled on his back and hands leading to burn injuries" - how does one "spill a chemical on back and hands"? Could use a better explanation

Personal life

• "Kapoor practices vegetarianism, and credits the author Brian Hines' book Life is Fair for influencing this lifestyle choice.[95][96] He supports the People for the Ethical Treatment of Animals organisation through advertisement campaigns.[97][98]" -this should be in a different paragraph, the last paragraph could use some splitting and a little revamping. There's a mish mash of material in there, unrelated content should be in a new paragraph

Overall it's a solid article, but I think the prose lacks a little flair. I know it's difficult for the contemporary Indian actors though.♦ Dr. Blofeld 11:37, 16 March 2016 (UTC)

Thanks for the review, Dr. Blofeld. All your comments have been addressed. Yeah, with the lack of literature available on contemporary actors, it's an uphill task to write about them. I guess we just have to make do with what is available. :) --Krimuk|90 (talk) 02:45, 17 March 2016 (UTC)

I'm leaning towards support anyway.♦ Dr. Blofeld 10:57, 27 March 2016 (UTC)

Thanks Blofeld! Let me know if I can improve it some more. :) --Krimuk|90 (talk) 12:03, 27 March 2016 (UTC)

Coordinator note: This nomination seems to have stalled and there is no consensus for promotion after several weeks. Therefore, I will be archiving the nomination. --Laser brain (talk) 11:56, 26 April 2016 (UTC)

• Closing note: This candidate has been archived, but there may be a delay in bot processing of the close. Please see WP:FAC/ar, and leave the {{featured article candidates}} template in place on the talk page until the bot goes through. --Laser brain (talk) 11:56, 26 April 2016 (UTC)

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