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The article was promoted by SandyGeorgia 15:52, 24 January 2012 [1].

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Nominator(s): Nikkimaria (talk) 18:17, 11 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Ray Farquharson was a doctor, medical researcher, university professor, and Wing Commander in the RCAF. He was a Member of the Order of the British Empire and was inaugrated into the Canadian Medical Hall of Fame. This article recently passed MilHist's A-class review, and was reviewed off-wiki by a nursing prof and a research librarian (although both are non-Wikipedians). Despite its relative shortness, it incorporates pretty much every reliable source I could locate on the topic, including both journal/database search results and archival newspapers (copies available on request). I welcome any and all comments. Cheers, Nikkimaria (talk) 18:17, 11 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]

  • Media review - Images are fine. I personally would move the middle (headshot) image to the main infobox and move the image of him during WWI down to the "Career" section (keeping in left aligned). I think it'd look better that way, but it's your choice, since the current layout is functional. Sven Manguard Wha? 17:58, 12 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  • Thanks for reviewing, Sven. I originally had the headshot image in the lead, but moved it down when an infobox was requested at A-class review. Nikkimaria (talk) 19:48, 12 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  • Support: Wow, article reads like a charm. 1a/b/c/d/e (✔), 2a/b/c (✔), 3 (✔), and 4 (✔). I'm being picky here, but why isn't the photo of the building align to the left, since the building is facing right? --Sp33dyphil ©hatontributions 03:37, 13 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  • Thanks Sp33dyphil! I've adjusted the placement of the image based on your suggestion. Cheers, Nikkimaria (talk) 03:57, 13 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  • Support -- Reviewed and supported at MilHist ACR, when I copyedited prose and spotchecked some online sources, as well as checking images, structure, detail and referencing. As there have been a few changes since that review I've gone though this again from top to bottom and made a couple of minor copyedits -- still looks good, and worth the bronze star. Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 13:42, 13 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Comments on footnotes

  • It would help the reader if you included links to articles in the Canadian Medical Association Journal. A subscription is not required. The articles are available on the CMAJ website and from Pubmed Central. For example FN 52 is available from CMAJ and PubMed Central. One possibility is to add pmc=1229725 to the template.
  • FN 52 is in issue 8 and not issue 9.
  • Perhaps include the author for FN 50: Steven Wharry.
  • FN 44: Royal Society of Medicine News – this appears to be the Journal of the Royal Society of Medicine – issue 7 or 8 (unfortunately not available online)
  • FN 27 and 41 cite Modern Medicine which I assume is the same as Modern Medicine of Canada that ceased publication in 1991. It was published in Toronto. As the journal is not easy to find I suggest adding "of Canada". Is the journal sufficiently notable for a redlink in the article?
    • That's a different publication. Modern Medicine was published in the US, and AFAICT is still being published, though my local library doesn't subscribe to it. As to notability, my guess would be yes, but I haven't researched the publication. Nikkimaria (talk) 14:58, 15 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  • Best, Henry (2003) – Perhaps include middle initials: Henry B.M. Best

Aa77zz (talk) 12:23, 15 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]

    • Except for Modern Medicine, these have been addressed. Thanks for reviewing. Nikkimaria (talk) 14:58, 15 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]
      • The catalog of the National Library of Medicine lists a number of journals that include "Modern Medicine" in their titles – but none appears to be indexed by Medline. I still favour the defunct Canadian journal. Aa77zz (talk) 23:00, 15 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]
      • Also, the journal is not indexed by the Thomson Reuters ISI Journal Citation Reports database. See here. Aa77zz (talk) 23:17, 15 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  • Support I supported this article's A class nomination, and also think that the FA criteria are met. Great work. Nick-D (talk) 00:08, 21 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Comments

  • Link Claude, Ontario in the lead? – it is linked to Caledon in the Early life section. Claude is small and not well known – perhaps In Early life could perhaps explain that Claude is a small rural community 30 mi northwest of Toronto see: Claude on Google maps
  • "received his early education at Durham" where Durham is currently linked to the city in England. I suspect this should be linked to Durham, Ontario. In UK English I would write "in Durham" rather than "at Durham".
  • "Robert, was the managing editor for The Globe and Mail": perhaps "became the managing editor..." (unless Robert was already managing editor when Ray was born)
  • "under Dr. Duncan Graham." omit the "Dr."
  • "Farquharson then received research fellowships at Massachusetts General Hospital" perhaps recast as "Farquharson was awarded a series of research fellowship at Massachusetts General Hospital"
  • "He published papers discussing the excretion..." – I don't like the word 'discussion' here – perhaps recast as "He published the results of his studies on the excretion..." - or simply "He published papers on the excretion ..."
  • FN 9 – Obituary - a subscription to the BMJ is required to access the 1965 article. The link from the title usually indicated free access. In this case it would be better to unlink the title and include doi=10.1136/bmj.1.5450.1616 The issue apparently forms part of volume "1".
  • The link need not indicate free access; I've added a subscription-needed tag. Nikkimaria (talk) 13:53, 21 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  • "In 1931 he married Christina Jane Fraser, with whom he had two daughters: Helen, who became a hematologist, and Catherine Jane." is not supported by FN 9 which has only "He is survived by his wife and two daughters". I suggest deleting this citation – there are 3 others.
  • FN 13. Although a pdf of the obituary is available from PubMed Central the reference should be to the journal in which the article appeared: Trans Am Clin Climatol Assoc. 1966; 77: l–li.
  • "Farquharson discovered what is now known as the "Farquharson Phenomenon"". Now known? Pubmed and google searches suggests that the term isn't used in the current literature - perhaps recast to "Farquharson discovered what became known as ..." Aa77zz (talk) 10:32, 21 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Wow – I'm impressed with your rapid response. (Perhaps you should look at the FAC John Tyler). Here are few more comments:

  • FNs 7, 9, 11, 22, 30, 40, 44, 47, 50, 52 are citations to journal articles in pdf format and do not really require retrieval dates which serve no purpose - but do no harm.
  • FN 12 – This is a poor source - the CD could become difficult to obtain and the information difficult to verify. Is it really required? Do your other sources contain similar information? The only occasion when FN 12 is the only citation is for the year (1951) when Farquharson became a member of the NRC.
  • "Farquharson concluded that existing government support for research in Canada failed to specifically address medical research as an independent discipline and was financially insufficient.[4][12]". You might consider replacing FN 12 here with this reference: "Report on the meeting of the Association of Canadian Medical Colleges: The Medical Research Council of Canada". Canadian Medical Association Journal. 83 (25): 1331–1334. December 1960. PMC 1939026. This gives some of the background behind the formation of the MRC.
  • It might be useful to the readers if when discussing his collaboration with Squires you include a citation to the relevant publication: Johnson, Macallister W (November 1951). "The effect of prolonged administration of thyroid". Annals Internal Medicine. 35 (9): 1008–1022. {{cite journal}}: Unknown parameter |coauthors= ignored (|author= suggested) (help) (abstract available online but subscription needed for full text version)

That is all for now. Aa77zz (talk) 15:15, 21 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]

  • Okay, mostly done. The CD is a very useful source, containing interviews from people who knew Farquharson (including his daughter and some research collaborators). Part of it is available on Youtube here; do you think it would be worth adding that as a convenience link? Nikkimaria (talk) 15:29, 21 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  • I would add a link to the YouTube video in an "External links" section (even though the web page in FN5 -Canadian Medical Hall of Fame- contains such a link) Aa77zz (talk) 16:54, 21 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  • Support – I believe this article satisfies the FA criteria. Aa77zz (talk) 16:54, 21 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  • Support – Fixed one little MoS issue I found, but the rest of the article looks sharp. All the FA criteria are easily met. Well done. Giants2008 (Talk) 02:26, 22 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Nikkimaria, I'm finding some issues with the citations-- see my sample edits[2]-- if you need help learning how to poke around in PubMed, pls ping me. Can the lead be expanded? I think some of the PMIDs aren't turning up because the titles are wrong. Also, did you see PMID 20328253 ? SandyGeorgia (Talk) 01:22, 24 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks Sandy. I had seen that article, but it's basically a placeholder pointing to one of the articles I do cite - that issue was published shortly after Farquharson's death, so the full obituary did not appear until a later issue, and incorporated all of the info in that article. I've fleshed out the lead a bit and added a couple more ID numbers. Nikkimaria (talk) 04:34, 24 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]


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