Wikipedia:Featured article candidates/Percy Chapman/archive1
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The article was promoted by GrahamColm 18:03, 16 October 2012 [1].
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Percy Chapman was an extremely glamorous England cricket captain in the 1920s and 1930s. He was the golden boy of cricket, who had it all from an early age and there seemed little limit on what he could do. But by the end of his career, he was an overweight alcoholic who quite possibly captained England while drunk on the field. Over the following years, he declined pretty quickly and died a lonely, alcohol-ravaged figure. I've been working at this for a while, and it is currently a GA and had a PR by Brianboulton. All comments welcome. Sarastro1 (talk) 12:20, 7 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Comments by Lemurbaby
Excellent (if technical) prose, and an interesting read about someone who was once on everyone's lips, but who I'd never heard about before. Well done putting this article together. Just a few nitpicks:
- "contemporaries rated him extremely highly" - very highly ?
- "spent his final years, mainly alone" - comma not needed
- "the team achieved seven consecutive team" - is this right?
- Lemurbaby (talk) 18:22, 11 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Support - Lemurbaby (talk) 04:28, 12 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Image Review
- Percy Chapman.jpg : appropriate copyright, Commons, appropriate use in article
- APF Chapman.jpg : appropriate copyright, Commons, appropriate use in article
- Sydney Mail, Nov 15 1922, p 6.jpg : appropriate copyright, Commons, appropriate use in article
- StateLibQld 1 233112... : needs a US copyright tag, otherwise okay
- Douglas_Jardine_Cigarette_Card.jpg : appropriate copyright, Commons, appropriate use in article
Support: I carried out a detailed peer review here. I hope to see comments here from other reviewers; pending that, my view is that this article continues the high standards found in recent cricket articles, which have hugely improved in the last few years. These articles are best when the subject has human dimensions beyond the field of performance, and Chapman's sad story of decline is a great example of this. Brianboulton (talk) 18:26, 11 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- Thank you for the kind words and the usual invaluable help and advice. Sarastro1 (talk) 18:38, 11 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Comments –
Don't think the second word in "County Cricket" needs the capitalization.
University cricket: "He took part in a variety of social engagements and also became involved in other sports." The "also" is redundant to "and", and could easily be removed.
"where critics considered he could have reached a high standard if motivated to do so". Is "where critics considered he could have" a standard formulation in British writing? Here we'd just use "believed" or something.
MCC tour to Australia and New Zealand: Don't need two New South Wales cricket team links here.
Ashes series of 1926: Is "a" missing from "but fielded as substitute"?
Stray quotation mark after "The correspondent also commented".
Aftermath and success: Space needed after ref 76 in the last paragraph of the section.Giants2008 (Talk) 15:35, 12 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]
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- Decline: "to the extent of dropping down the batting in order to avoid doing so". Would this be better as "to the extent of dropping down the batting order to avoid doing so"? That avoids a possible redundancy while placing an "order" in a spot where it is useful.
- A reference would be nice for note 7, since the others have them. Giants2008 (Talk) 01:32, 16 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]
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- Support; a read through reveals no obvious concerns. There are a few points at which I might have phrased things slightly differently, but nothing of any worry. As usual, a very well written article about an interesting chap in the history of English cricket, well done. Harrias talk 10:09, 14 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- Addressed comments from Crisco 1492
- Support on prose. Interesting and fairly comprehensible even to those with no background in cricket. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 23:37, 15 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]
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