Wikipedia:Featured article candidates/Nantes/archive2

The following is an archived discussion of a featured article nomination. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in Wikipedia talk:Featured article candidates. No further edits should be made to this page.

The article was archived by Sarastro1 via FACBot (talk) 21:21, 3 April 2017 [1].

Nantes edit

Nominator(s): Oie blanche (talk) 11:31, 2 April 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Hello, this is the second time I nominate the article. It is about a city in France. I believe flaws highlighted during the last proposal have been adressed. Oie blanche (talk) 11:31, 2 April 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Oppose

Starting in a random section, Economy:
"The city was the largest harbour": A city isn't a harbour. It's not uncommon to say for instance "Nantes was the largest harbour", because that's short for "Nantes harbour was the largest harbour".
"Nantes and its area is": Plural, so "are" (and "area" is ambiguous here)
"the city has developed itself": wrong word
"After the moving of much of the port activities in Saint-Nazaire": I hardly know where to start.
"the city invented itself a new image": wrong word
"a large cultural offer": wrong word
"to give itself": wrong word
And so on. The article isn't B-class yet; it need rewriting by someone familiar with Standard English. - Dank (push to talk) 21:33, 2 April 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Please add translated titles for citations in French, as WP:HOWCITE recommends. --122.108.141.214 (talk) 23:47, 2 April 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Oppose. I'm a much less careful editor than Dank and even I can see glaring grammatical errors like "the Antiquity" in the lead. Needs a good copyedit, and it's not fair to expect it to happen here Jimfbleak - talk to me? 08:52, 3 April 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Closing comment: I think this needs to be worked on, and reviewed, away from FAC before it is brought back. I would strongly advise getting some outside review and even a co-nominator before renominating. Sarastro1 (talk) 21:21, 3 April 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Closing note: This candidate has been archived, but there may be a delay in bot processing of the close. Please see WP:FAC/ar, and leave the {{featured article candidates}} template in place on the talk page until the bot goes through. Sarastro1 (talk) 21:21, 3 April 2017 (UTC)[reply]

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