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Jozo Tomasevich

Featured article candidates/Jozo Tomasevich/archive1

Nominator(s): Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 08:13, 5 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Jozo Tomasevich was a Yugoslav-American economist and historian whose works on Yugoslavia in WWII continue to be widely cited today despite his first book on the Chetniks being published nearly fifty years ago. According to the German historian Klaus Schmider, it is a tragedy that he died before completing the third volume of his planned series on Yugoslavia in WWII which was to be focussed on the Partisans. Even his second volume had to be published posthumously in 2001, with editing by his daughter. I have used his works right across my WP contributions on WWII on Yugoslavia, and his work forms the foundation on which many more recent historians have built. This is my second nom of a historian of WWII in Yugoslavia after Radoje Pajović. Have at it. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 08:13, 5 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Image review

Suggest adding alt text. Nikkimaria (talk) 05:14, 6 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Done, thanks. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 07:59, 6 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Matarisvan

Hi Peacemaker67, some comments:

"the former Yugoslavia": just "Yugoslavia" would be fine, no?

yes, fixed. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 09:56, 13 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Why is SFSU linked in the lead on second use and not first?

Good question. Fixed. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 09:56, 13 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Perhaps clarify that The Chetniks was part of the 3 volume series and not a standalone book? I thought so till I read the Biblio section.

Done. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 10:23, 13 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Is "so-called" really needed? We have to be neutral and we already say it was a puppet state. Consider removing in the lead and the body?

Actually it is necessary in my opinion, as it was named that, but ironically far from independent. Tomasevich himself called it an Italo-German quasi-protectorate. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 10:23, 13 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]

"Klaus Schimder, the RMAS lecturer": Use "a" instead of "the"? I'm assuming Schmider was not the only lecturer at the RMAS.

Yep, whoops. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 10:35, 13 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]

I'm not sure about this, but wouldn't the Mihailović picture be better placed at the start of the World War II subsection?

Good call, done. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 10:38, 13 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Consider adding the ISBN for Tomasevich and Vucinich 1969. Is this the one: 9780520015364? Also, Google Books shows Vucinich here was an editor and not an author.

Done. No, Google Books is often wrong about such things, Vucinich was the author of two chapters as well as the editor. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 09:30, 15 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Link to The American Historical Review and Nationalities Papers, as done for other journals?

Done. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 10:42, 13 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Are there any details on his collaboration with Wayne Vucinich?

Not beyond him contributing a chapter to the book. They taught at different universities in California and I understand they were close colleagues and co-received an award in 1989, and I'd love to know more given the Vucinich brothers were Serbs and Tomasevich a Croat, but they appear to have got along very well. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 09:30, 15 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]

I'm not sure military biography is the right WPMH task force here, you should consider removing it and retaining only the historiography task force tag.

Excellent point, he was not a military person. Removed. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 09:30, 15 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Has anyone endeavored to publish the Tomasevic papers at HILA or Volume 3 of his series? I found one article on this from the Washington Post but it was paywalled.

Not that I'm aware of. It would be wonderful if Vol 3 was published. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 10:35, 13 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]

That's all from me, cheers Matarisvan (talk) 12:39, 7 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks so much for taking a look, Matarisvan. I reckon I might have addressed all your comments. See what you think? Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 09:30, 15 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Hi @Peacemaker67, above comments all OK. A minor issue I forgot to spot last time: we need page numbers for a couple of the sources, namely Baletić 1997, Prosecutor versus Vojislav Šešelj 2008, Irwin 2000, Auty 1976, Dragnich 1976 and Campbell 1976. The other sources are only one pagers, so those don't have any problems, but these one have multiple pages, so you will need to add the page numbers for them. Matarisvan (talk) 08:31, 22 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Comments by Pendright

Placeholder - Pendright (talk) 21:00, 23 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Lead:

Tomasevich was born in the Kingdom of Dalmatia, [then] part of Austria-Hungary, and after completing his [formal] schooling , [he] earned a doctorate in economics at [from] the University of Basel in Switzerland.

Look these changes over

His final book was the second volume of the series – War and Revolution in Yugoslavia 1941–1945: Occupation and Collaboration – which was published posthumously in 2001 after editing by his daughter Neda.

after usually means -> in the time following an event or another period <-> in which case, it soumds like the book was edited after its publication - what am I missing?

In an obituary in the Slavic Review, Tomasevich was described as "a master of scholarly skills, a person of bountiful erudition, wit and human dignity".

Why is an not his?

All done. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 09:46, 26 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Early life

Košarni Do is a hamlet of Donja Banda and is today part of the Orebić municipality within the Dubrovnik-Neretva County of Croatia.[1]

today?

Nado returned to the village in 1894, [and he] married the daughter of his first cousin and worked as a farmer.

Suggest these changes

In 1938, he was the recipient of a two-year Rockefeller fellowship and moved to the US,[3] thereby "availing himself of the rich resources of Harvard University".

"availing himself of the rich resources of Harvard University" -> If this is a direct quote, should there be attribution-if not, then should italics be used?

The other brother living in Košarni Do received the share of the fourth brother who, by then, was a merchant mariner living in New Zealand.[4]

Could drop "other"

Before the outbreak of World War II – and now known by the anglicised Tomasevich – he moved to California.

and then known

In 1937, Tomasevich married Neda Brelić, a high school teacher. They were happily married for 57 years and had three children – Anthony, Neda Ann, and Lasta. In 1976, Tomasevich contributed an essay to a book in which he conducted a sociological and historical analysis of his extended family reaching back to the early nineteenth century.

Somehow,Chronologically, these sentences seem out of order?

His widow Neda died on July 5, 2002, at 88.[8]

Is where she died relative?

Yugoslavia's economy

The first appeared in German in 1934 and was titled Die Staatsschulden Jugoslaviens (The National Debt of Yugoslavia).

during 1934

The following year, he had Financijska politika Jugoslavije, 1929–1934 (Fiscal Policy of Yugoslavia, 1929–1934) published in Serbo-Croatian, covering much of the same material but more accessible to Yugoslavs.[1]

Does 1929-1934 need to be repeated?
which covered

A 1940 review of the book in Weltwirtschaftliches Archiv, by Professor Mirko Lamer – who later served with the United Nations as an expert at the Food and Agriculture Organization – described Novac i kredit as an important work that filled a large gap in Yugoslav economic literature, and also gave a vivid picture of then-current economic theory.[9]

and it also

International marine resources and Yugoslav peasants

The first [book] was International Agreements on Preservation of Marine Resources, [that was] published by Stanford University Press in 1943.

Suggest the above changes

The second book, Peasants, Politics, and Economic Change in Yugoslavia [was] published in 1955, ~~was~~ [and] described by Vucinich as "a study of monumental scope [which] has been widely recognized as the most comprehensive and accomplished study in the field".

Suggest the above changes

World War II

In 1957, Tomasevich received a San Francisco State University grant for Slavic and Eastern European studies.[12]

Suggest -> In 1957, Tomasevich received a grant from San Francisco State University for Slavic and Eastern European studies.[12]

The first volume focused on the Chetnik movement led by Draža Mihailović, which was subtitled The Chetniks and appeared in 1975.

In the context used, what does appeared mean?

Soon after it was published, the book was reviewed by Phyllis Auty, professor of modern history at Simon Fraser University.

Replace the comma with "who was a

The third volume in the planned trilogy, which was to cover the Partisans, was 75 per cent complete at the time of his death,[1] and remains unpublished.

and it

@Peacemaker67: This is it for now. Pendright (talk) 03:22, 26 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]