Wikipedia:Featured article candidates/Hyderabad, India/archive5

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The article was not promoted by Ian Rose 10:02, 6 July 2013 (UTC) [1].[reply]

Hyderabad, India edit

Nominator(s): Omer123hussain (talk) 07:47, 2 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]

I am nominating this article for featured article because, currently its a Good article and peer reviewed for twice along with the comprehensive contribution by Dwaipayan (talk · contribs) and Stfg (talk · contribs). The article is about a heritage and traditional city, also known for its historical Bazaars and modern economical growth. Regards :)--Omer123hussain (talk) 07:47, 2 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Comments I've read through it once (on smartphone) and can see the prose is still a bit woolly. Will have a go at tightening it and post queries below. Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 07:56, 19 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]

~~Any reason why the foreign words in the cuisine subsection aren't italicised?~~

~~However, no sources define when or by whom the city was named.~~ ~~- umm, is this actually stated somewhere or is it because Peterson doesn't provide one? This needs a source.~~

In 2002, a blast in Dilsukhnagar claimed two lives,[26] while in May and August 2007, terrorist groups detonated a series of bombs in the city, causing communal tension and riots.[27] A series of blasts that occurred in February 2013 are the latest terrorist attacks in Hyderabad - If we are just classifying these as terror attacks, I'd amalgamate them into one sentence.

Hi, thanks for your comments and c/e. Wow, prose is better now after your c/e work at the article.

I don’t remember exactly when, but it was advised in the earlier GOCE c/e or by GA/FA reviewers to avoid italicizing of foreign words to maintain consistency with remaining article foreign words.
Removed "However, no sources define when or by whom the city was named." Because all the sources say's that the city was founded and named during Mohammed Quli Qutb shah. So I hope its better to remove the sentence to avoid confusion.
While classifying terror attacks we had given minor details of the post blast impact and disturbance occured in the city, because the witnessed post blast communal riots, which provoked the impact of further communal riots with different intervals in the city. So keeping it neutral point of view, we had just given neutral view of the blasts and its impact. Regards :)--Omer123hussain (talk) 20:05, 19 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]

ok - need to think about these. Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 20:39, 19 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]

I'm sure it won't have been me who advised against italicising the food terms. The application of MOS:ITALIC isn't clear here. Some of those terms are in common use in British English (for example, biryani is in everyday use in the UK). Trouble is, I don't know which are and which aren't. While I'm here, Casliber, thanks for your copy edits to this. They are a great improvement. --Stfg (talk) 10:49, 20 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]

For sure its not you, but if it is much necessary I will work on it. Please advice :)--Omer123hussain (talk) 19:00, 20 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Done with italicised asper MOS:FOREIGN, included Biryani, as it is generally not considered loanword. Hope I am moving correctly. Regards :)--Omer123hussain (talk) 00:17, 21 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]

~~any significant parks, gardens or environmental reserves in the city or suburbs?~~

Yes, the significant environmental reserves parks in the city includes Nehru Zoological Park—a regular large zoo and Mahavir Harina Vanasthali National Park—a deer national park which houses and dedicated to protect rare species of deers, KBR National park for birds. Along with these the city houses multiple small parks to preserve deers and lakes that attracts seasonal birds, as far as from Australia and Indonesia.

environmental research centers include: International Crops Research Institute for the Semi-Arid Tropics

Regards :)--Omer123hussain (talk) 22:52, 19 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]

I think this material is worth adding. Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 09:42, 20 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Will include some text in Geography section, after collecting citations. Hope it will work. :)--Omer123hussain (talk) 19:00, 20 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Done Regards :)--Omer123hussain (talk) 00:08, 21 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]

In summary on comprehensiveness and prose, a tentative support - looks much better now and I can't see any actionable issues right now. However I note that (a) it is a long article so it might still have some prose issues that will be uncovered by others and that (b) I am not an expert on Hyderabad so others might identify some wieghting or comprehensiveness issues....but we are heading in the right direction definitely. Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 08:38, 21 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Tons of Thanks for your support and c/e, it had improved the article a lot. Regards :)--Omer123hussain (talk) 16:32, 21 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Delegate comment -- After remaining open over a month, and no comments for the past two weeks, this review seems to have stalled so I'll be archiving shortly. Because it hasn't generated much comment, you can re-nominate before the usual 2-week period following the archiving if you choose to. Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 05:57, 6 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Closing note: This candidate has been archived, but there may be a delay in bot processing of the close. Please see WP:FAC/ar, and leave the {{featured article candidates}} template in place on the talk page until the bot goes through. Ian Rose (talk) 05:57, 6 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]

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