Wikipedia:Featured article candidates/Dean Smith/archive1
- The following is an archived discussion of a featured article nomination. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in Wikipedia talk:Featured article candidates. No further edits should be made to this page.
The article was not promoted 04:34, 30 March 2007.
Dean Smith edit
It has reached all of the Featured article criteria:
- It is well written, comprehensive, factually accurate, neutral and stable.
- It complies with the standards set out in the manual of style and relevant WikiProjects.
- It has images.
- It is of appropriate length, staying focused on the main topic without going into unnecessary detail.
--Sa.vakilian(t-c) 19:10, 22 March 2007 (UTC)[reply]
- Object Image problems. All the fair use images are too large; the longest dimension should not be more than 400px. Please shrink the images, reupload them, and tag them with
{{subst:furd}}. The fair use images all need detailed fair use rationales. Also, Image:Devoutdemocrats.jpg doesn't even have a copyright tag. ShadowHalo 00:33, 23 March 2007 (UTC)[reply] - Oppose pending the following issues: Coaching style section should probably be made into paragraph form, paragraphs in the lead should be condensed—several 1-2 sentence paragraphs in the lead is unacceptable, as a matter of fact there are too many short paragraphs throughout the article. The short paragraphs have the effect of making the article choppy as thoughts appear independently and randomly. Think of ways to condense them into larger paragraphs using sentences that bridge the gap between thoughts. Prose could use work also, here's a few examples:
- "After the 1966 season, Smith would never finish lower than third in the ACC" would never finish is clumsy, just change it to "never finished".
- "his decision about whether or not to replace a struggling Matt Doherty as" the or not is redundant and uses unnecessary wording. Just change it "his decision about whether to replace"
- "He had said that if he ever felt he could not give his team the same enthusiasm he had given it for years, he would retire" This needs work.
Also there are a lot of self contained sentences that don't flow together with the surrounding material. Especially in the Recognition section, look at this section of the Michael Jordan article I helped write for a comparison. Incidentally the recognition section should probably be renamed Legacy, and should include some quotes about him. Furthermore, the article could use a little critical commentary of him, such as how his system was sometimes criticized for being too team oriented (such as in the old joke "Who's the only person that can hold Michael Jordan under 20 points?"). Quadzilla99 18:22, 23 March 2007 (UTC)[reply]
- In addition the section on his coaching career could use significant expansion as well. Quadzilla99 18:26, 23 March 2007 (UTC)[reply]
- The above discussion is preserved as an archive. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in Wikipedia talk:Featured article candidates. No further edits should be made to this page.