Wikipedia:Featured article candidates/Chevrolet Corvette/archive1

Chevrolet Corvette edit

This car is an american legend, and of course, the article is long, well written, with lots of pictures to illustrate it. I believe that this is featured article material. —Preceding unsigned comment added by Karrmann (talk • contribs) 21:10, December 15, 2005 (UTC)

Object. The article has no references except for three external links, two to AutoWeek articles regarding the upcoming Blue Devil and one in the oldest surviving unit that points to a page that is "closed for remodeling". The links for these two sections need to be converted into full citations and references for the remaining fifteen sections need to be identified. --Allen3 ^talk 22:17, 15 December 2005 (UTC)[reply]

Comment. With proper references, in my opinion, it would be make a great FA.---(Smerk)

Support. New and improved sources seem to have been added. I'd like to see them placed with their corresponding facts in the article itself but other than that, I see a wonderfully written and laid out article. -- Hurricane Eric - my dropsonde - archive 05:36, 20 December 2005 (UTC)[reply]

Object. Informal and unprofessional language, for example, I will highlight awkward phrasings (or informal ones) in bold, including some omissions:

Harley Earl loved sports cars, and GIs returning after serving overseas World War II were bringing home MGs, Jaguars, Alfa Romeos and the like. [disjunct transition] Earl convinced GM that they needed to build a two-seat sports car. The result was the 1953 Corvette, unveiled to the public at that year's Motorama car show. The original Corvette emblem incorporated an American flag into the design; this was later dropped, since associating the flag with a product was frowned upon

Some of it is informal language. Some of it is ambiguous and unclear, or there is disjunct transition, and very generalised sentence, ie. almost like a grandfather telling the reader a story, which is not the tone of the encylopedia. And compressed words for very significant actions "the result was" (oh, what happened? Something might have been explained later, but the reader is left jarred)....failure to wikify some parts, and overwikification of some parts. Convinced? How? What exacty transpired between him and the development team? And so on, etc. etc. this is only one paragraph, there are many such examples.

Featured articles should have a stoic, non-enthusiastic and professional tone, while engaging the interest of the reader about the events. This article doesn't do that. It needs to be copyedited by someone knowledgeable about the subject.

Also, lack of references - there are at most, 3 references cited throughout the entire article. A standard FA should at least have ten, or even twenty. A footnote system would be preferred, but the lack of any substantial references horrifies me. "V8 engine history" is not even formatted as a reference. -- Natalinasmpf 19:41, 22 December 2005 (UTC)[reply]