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The following is an archived discussion of a featured article nomination. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in Wikipedia talk:Featured article candidates. No further edits should be made to this page.

The article was not promoted 00:24, 24 April 2008.

Bob Chappuis

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I'm nominating this article for featured article because it is an interesting broad article that has been stable since becomeing a WP:GA.TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTD) 14:49, 14 April 2008 (UTC)[reply]

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Issues resolved, Ealdgyth - Talk 13:57, 15 April 2008 (UTC)[reply]
All links checked out as good.Full disclosure, I passed this for GA back in Feb. Ealdgyth - Talk 15:06, 14 April 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Issues resolved, ЭLСОВВОLД talk 18:20, 15 April 2008 (UTC)[reply]
O.K. All images are on the right.--TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTD) 02:59, 15 April 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • Weak object
I will need convincing that the Time magazine is not a violation of fair use. I don't see any critical commentary anywhere about it or how it is an iconic picture or anything.
It is that the picture sort of marks one of the first people to star in football without playing both offense and defense. I have movee the picture to the part of the text that talks about this.--TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTD) 06:20, 15 April 2008 (UTC)[reply]
But the picture doesn't add unusual to the fact that he was the first does it? It just shows us what he looks like? Blnguyen (bananabucket) 03:12, 17 April 2008 (UTC)[reply]
By its inclusion in the article the picture adds a lot of information. Very few college football players ever make the cover of Time. When you read the lead and then scroll down for a quick look this picture jumps out at you. It is not unusual for an important politician, world leader, or corporate titan, but this image is sort of shocking and adds to the article for that reason.--TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTD) 16:45, 17 April 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Secondly, I think the first two sections and the last two sections are better off merged, since they are very short- unless you intend to expand. The last two sections could be called "after sport" for instance.
The last two sections have been merged. Are you sure about the first two?--TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTD) 06:16, 15 April 2008 (UTC)[reply]
I think so, because logically it works with his career only getting a bit of a start and being interrupted. A lot WW2 sports FA bios for people who played half a season before the war have it merged into early years, if it is very short, Blnguyen (bananabucket) 03:12, 17 April 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Can you name a couple for me to look at? How about if I make College football in 1942 a aubsection of Early Years?--TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTD) 16:40, 17 April 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Can you wikilink "receiver" for us plese? Blnguyen (bananabucket) 02:25, 15 April 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Done.--TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTD) 06:16, 15 April 2008 (UTC)[reply]
"Time noted that Chappuis had the ability to spot his receivers tearing downfield and defenders rushing in to nail him" is a bit peacockish. Can it be toned down or simply farmed off to a direct quote? Blnguyen (bananabucket) 02:25, 15 April 2008 (UTC)[reply]
done.--TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTD) 06:35, 15 April 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Another general thing, I think that there is too much Chappuis quoting, especially on mundane comments that he made in a colloquial style - this makes the article a bit knockabout for my taste - can't you just paraphrase and simply say that his father disliked OSU, or that he retired so that he can enjoy R&R? Blnguyen (bananabucket) 02:25, 15 April 2008 (UTC)[reply]
done for the two specific quotes that you mention.--TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTD) 06:30, 15 April 2008 (UTC)[reply]
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