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The following is an archived discussion of a featured article nomination. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in Wikipedia talk:Featured article candidates. No further edits should be made to this page.

The article was promoted by SandyGeorgia 21:22, 22 November 2009 [1].

Arbiter (Halo) edit

Nominator(s): Der Wohltemperierte Fuchs(talk) 20:33, 25 October 2009 (UTC)[reply]
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This is a relatively short article, but I feel it meets comprehensiveness criteria (and doesn't go into trivial details about plot). All references are reliable, and where possible the best sources have been used; some sources are used solely for author opinions, and are framed as such. Cheers, Der Wohltemperierte Fuchs(talk) 20:33, 25 October 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Ah, one of my old projects. Its nice to see it come this far. - Caribbean~H.Q. 20:34, 25 October 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Image review - The sole image has an appropriate FUR, and the alt text is fine. NW (Talk) 20:40, 25 October 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Comment: This sentence:

"this hesitance allows the humans to land on the ring, coordinate a resistance, and ultimately destroy the ring to stop the spread of the parasitic Flood, in conjunction with losing a Covenant ship Ascendant Justice to the Master Chief a short period of time later, resulting in the annihilation of a Covenant attack force" needs to be broken up more effectively. It reads poorly at the moment. MasterOfHisOwnDomain (talk) 09:02, 26 October 2009 (UTC)[reply]
Full Support - I see no issues with the article whatsoever. An image of the Halo Wars Arbiter would be nice, but isn't necessary for FA. --Teancum (talk) 15:51, 2 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]
The Halo Wars Arbiter is the one in the infobox :) Der Wohltemperierte Fuchs(talk) 16:39, 2 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]
Otherwise, sources look okay, links checked out with the link checker tool. Ealdgyth - Talk 16:07, 3 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]
    • For armchairempire, they're an established collectible/etc. site that has a team of editors and staff; I'm only using the reference to site their opinion in the article regarding an action figure. As for the Kotaku ref, I found a Todd McFarlane one that works just as well and replaced it. Der Wohltemperierte Fuchs(talk) 16:41, 3 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]
  • The armchairempire source is currently referencing the following:
  • "Following the release of Halo 2, Joyride Studios released an Arbiter action figure. This particular model was reviewed as a "great translation of the source material into plastic"." (lacks attribution to the site and appears to reference the first sentence also).
  • "The figure's dimensions were in proportion with other figures released by the studio, and the level of detail in the armor and weapons were described positively, but reviewers found fault with the neck articulation and design" (shouldn't it be "one reviewer found..."? and it's lacking attribution to the specific person/site)
  • "Other aspects mentioned were its compatibility with the Master Chief's action figure and its durability." (again, lacks attribution to the specific site) Ealdgyth - Talk 17:48, 3 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]
  • Dabs; please check the disambiguation links identified in the toolbox. Dabomb87 (talk) 05:28, 10 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]
That's more someone's bad judgment than an issue with this article: Luke Smith should have the disambig "(writer)" in all lowercase...instead someone moved it to uppercase and pointed the lower case title at a disambig that wasn't needed. I fixed that best I could.--Kung Fu Man (talk) 11:31, 10 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]
Someone moved Luke Smith (writer) to Luke Smith and then back to Luke Smith (Writer), but it should be back at its original (writer) disambig now. Der Wohltemperierte Fuchs(talk) 14:08, 10 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]
  • Lean support I am not a very knowledgeable about references, but I guess since the user above said they were fine they are. I am not really one to judge prose, however I did get cunfused in a couple parts, mostly "Gravemind convinces the Arbiter that the Great Journey spells doom for his race". It is not spelled out why this is bad. Can you explain? Also, there is an extra space in "Flood.[9]." Also Frank Oc'onner is repeated twice. Martin Raybourne (talk) 00:13, 16 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]
    • Thanks for the review. I've taken care of the above issues, hopefully... can you check it again and see if I've satisfied your concerns? Der Wohltemperierte Fuchs(talk) 02:01, 16 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]
      • Ok I think the other user and you had sorted it out. I am striking my oppose. Martin Raybourne (talk) 23:25, 16 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]
Support - great job. Connormah (talk) 03:42, 19 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]
Support I also find no significant gaps in the article's coverage, well done. —Ed!(talk) 22:09, 21 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]
  • Note: the article needs an WP:NBSP review (Halo 2, etc., should be joined to avoid hanging numbers). SandyGeorgia (Talk) 20:27, 22 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]
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