Wbarnett18
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If you have any questions, please don't hesitate to contact me on my talk page. Shalor (Wiki Ed) (talk) 15:54, 17 January 2018 (UTC)
Comments & Critiques edit
I really like the topic, structure, timeline and detail that the article goes into. However, in some places, I think there is too much detail and in others, there is too little.
For example, I would have like to see more in the trivia section. I want more information on modern Brazilian Japanese cuisine. I want to learn more about their cuisine as well as how they've integrated Brazilian and Japanese customs together.
An example of where there is too much detail is when you talk about the history. While it is interesting to read about the contrasting textures of Brazilian and Japanese rice, it also seems a tad out of place. However, I would have also liked it if you would have expanded on differences like these, as well as discussing whether or not developing this new cuisine and customs helped them integrate into Brazilian society.
Comments & Critiques edit
I think this is a good summary of his presidency, but it could use a lot more information. What other police did he pass? Was anyone opposed to him and why? What was his voice count. What made him choose politics instead of being a doctor? They are many places where the article where it needs more on him and his presidency.
I would also to see a section of the impact and legacy of his presidency, outside of the roads and the capital. More sources, more in each section, and more topics on this matter. .
Forró and Redemptive Regionalism from the Brazilian Northeast edit
Hi! I removed some content from the reception section and wanted to explain why I did this. Ultimately it was because they were book blurbs and not reviews per se.
Book blurbs are short statements that the publishers solicit from people in order to promote the book. These are not meant to serve as exhaustive reviews and are meant to be wholly positive. In many cases the people are chosen as part of a "quid pro quo" type of deal with either the publisher or the author - in other words, they write something nice for this book and the publisher and/or author will do the same for theirs. It's not uncommon for publishers to dip into their own pool of authors for these blurbs - if not, they're often chosen for the "wow" factor. Sometimes the publishers will pick promotional blurbs from full length reviews, but in those cases you always need to find the full length reviews to verify this. In any case, book blurbs aren't really usable since they're at best primary sources and aren't considered to be neutral since the author of the blurb is specifically trying to sell you the book.
I'm a little concerned that there aren't many sources out there for this book and that it doesn't pass notability guidelines for books. It doesn't look like it's been reviewed in publications other than the one listed in the article and while it's been used as a source, it hasn't received any in-depth coverage in these works from what I can see. Books typically need about 3-5 independent, reliable sources to establish notability. Primary sources can back up basic information but cannot establish notability. It may be better to work on an article about the author, if there is independent coverage about him and his work available. This would also be a better location for the author section in the article, as book articles rarely have author biographies in them unless the author's past is especially relevant to the book, as in the case of autobiographies. Shalor (Wiki Ed) (talk) 18:20, 27 March 2018 (UTC)