Vannie227

Dear Vannie227, why are you canceling my editing? I aded allot of new inforamtion that was missing. please read my changes (Borisshin (talk) 13:50, 24 September 2015 (UTC))

• But look at what was added:

"Netafim™ is the global leader ..."

No, it's a company. If industry analysts have published market share or market saturation stats on Netafirm, by all means include those. But there's absolutely no way you can start an Encyclopedia article like that.

"delivers innovative solutions to more than 110 countries across the globe. Founded in 1965, Netafim pioneered the drip revolution, creating a paradigm shift toward low-flow agricultural irrigation. Today Netafim offers a wide range of state-of-the-art irrigation and complementary solutions"

Seriously!? Write in English, not bullshit. This sort of nonsense is why we strongly advise people in marketing or public relations to stay the hell away from articles on their company.

• So I reverted an egregious violation of WP:NPOV and probably WP:COI, the latter since I can't fathom why anyone else would use such flowery yet substanceless prose.

• Don't take this as an endorsement of the other version which isn't great either. If you can improve it without violating core content policies, you'll get no grief from me. Vannie227 (talk) 19:07, 24 September 2015 (UTC)

Hi Vannie227, i agree some of the text is too marketing oriented, and should be changed. However, there are some items, such as the history and the Permira requisition, and also the winning in SIWI award that are true, and there is no reason why they shouldn't be there. By the way, i'm not familiar with Borisshin, but I think his version is more updated than the old one. Please change only what you think is not a fact, but leave other things that are. Hrs 2015 (talk) 12:25, 1 October 2015 (UTC)

Yamsafer Article Edit

Hello Vannie,

I'm writing to you from Yamsafer. We have been contributing to Yamsafer Article but it keeps getting cut. As far as I believe that some part of it might be promotional hence fetched from the content that should be written in an encyclopedia while some parts should be fine to be kept such as the innovations in a less promotional nutshel which are all facts, and the history brief mentioning round B investment, and recognition which is all news and publicity about yamsafer. The culture part is just a cultural part we are not promoting anything we are proud to have this culture within a hard political, societal and economical situation.

I hope you support us as we are proud to be the first successful Palestinian start up.

Looking forward to your reply, — Preceding unsigned comment added by Pilar.zfsh (talk • contribs) 13:43, 19 October 2015 (UTC)