Cazzlong(Dominic) Review

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I really enjoy the description and though that is displayed throughout the beginning of the page. The topic is very relevant and the ideas presented are clearly going in the right direction. Seeming that you have a handful of sources and the right ideas it needs to all be put into a functioning article and less of a list. More authors and books or works would make this article immensely stronger. However, one thing I noticed, and will take away from, is your use of on outline like method to form a solid article from it. I believe that the use of this method will boost the overall structure and proficiency of the information you include.