UW Nightman

Feedback on Personalized_learning#Conferring

Hi! I'm the content expert for your course and your professor asked me to give you feedback on your edits at Personalized_learning#Conferring.

Offhand the section looks good and the only changes I really made were to add the full names of the people whose work you were quoting. When writing for an encyclopedia you need to make sure that you include an author's full name the first time you mention them, so that people can know who you're discussing - especially in cases where the author has a common last name. The section does use a lot of quotes, so you may want to be careful of relying too heavily on these to get the point across with future writing. You don't have to change any of this in your section, it's just something to be careful about for the future with your own work. I also noted that you had a section where you quoted heavily from content written by two students up for degrees, Javaye Devette Stubbs and Antony Smith. Both of the sources look like they'd be usable since Smith's article was published by a Johns Hopkins online publication and Stubbs was pursuing a specialist degree from Brenau, which required that she have received a Masters first, so it would likely be seen as sort of a close equivalent to a PhD. Just be cautious, as per WP:SCHOLARSHIP most student work hasn't gone through a rigorous enough editorial process to meet reliable source guidelines. As with before, this is mostly just something I'm cautioning you about for the future.

Other than those two notes, the section looks well written and you've made the topic easy to understand, which is a bonus. Shalor (Wiki Ed) (talk) 07:44, 3 May 2017 (UTC)