User talk:TreyonReche/Ministry of Education, Culture, Sports, Science and Technology

Peer Review: Gaoy53

This is an interesting topic to select and I enjoyed reading about it. Overall, this article is well-written but requires additional information (i.e., the leadership, evolvement of the ministry, its achievements, and its role in the society) to better articulate the subject. The lead should provide the readers with more background information and explanations of political terminologies and give an overview of the main sections of the article. In order to attain more content, you should consider seeking academic sources that are written to present information about the subject in an objective manner.

The structure of the article is clear through the use of headings and subtitles. It is organized in a way that highlights important information, making it easier to read for the audience. Also, there is an information box that summarizes the general information about the ministry, which contributes to organizational clarity. Also, great job on maintaining neutrality while presenting the information. See more: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:TreyonReche/Ministry_of_Education,_Culture,_Sports,_Science_and_Technology/Gaoy53_Peer_Review. Good luck on polishing your article!Gaoy53 (talk) 07:38, 1 February 2020 (UTC)

Feedback on your article

Greetings TreyonReche. You've got more than enough here and the stuff you've written is good. I had a few things I noticed:

• The content over on the Ministry of Education, Culture, Sports, Science and Technology article is out of sync. It looks like you've mostly been building text here that is sort of "extra" material you are planning on merging into the original article. That's fine. I sort of assumed you had copy-pasted material over and were editting so I did a little bit of merging material from that article in your current articles. Maybe that's not what you want. In any case, once you clean this iup, you should copy stuff over.
• Proofread for typos and such. I fixed a few.
• You've got at least one section on Gender Equality that is basically empty. I would either write that section to fill it out or just cut it.

In general, I think this needs a careful edit and some time-and effort to merge this material over. I think once you've edited for style and tone, this is good material based on good research. Move it over when you're ready! Good luck! —mako๛ 04:25, 13 February 2020 (UTC)