User talk:Tessakirk/sandbox

Latest comment: 7 years ago by Erumpfsnavely in topic Peer Review

Peer Review

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The changes you made on this article made it better and I can understand it better. I think that you should add some more sources and more info to the article. But overall, I think you did a good job in editing this article.

The information is clear and seems reliable. I would add a sentence or two on the women's sexuality section on the occurrence if a woman is physically unable to bare children, then what becomes of her in terms of sexuality. "Many believed that the outside socitey was much greater than what they were doing with polygamy" this word society is spelled wrong and the sentence doesn't make much sense. Better phrasing here would help that last section. Otherwise it seems nicely done! Erumpfsnavely (talk) 23:41, 28 February 2017 (UTC)Reply