User talk:TedABear/sandbox

peer review

The article is clear and provides a good amount of information and statistics. There is a good variation of sources, both academic and popular. All the information is arranged in a concise manner. The writing was fairly unbiased; the viewpoints seemed to be neutral throughout. There are some small grammatical errors, such as: “while even if women are received representation in a game…” This article could benefit from some examples of women characters in video games and how they further support your claims. You could also add another internal link somewhere in the article. Overall this draft is clear and impressive; I think the most beneficial improvement could be adding an example. Adadamo1 (talk) 00:29, 18 March 2016 (UTC)