User talk:Sunt727/sandbox

Latest comment: 6 years ago by April.W

This wiki is clearer than the former version and a plenty of good sentences included, nice.

Some little suggestion to improve this paper: 1.use external links to avoid jargon

2.for the pricing section, maybe using a table would be more readable.

3. include a summary sentence in the front of the section of Relevant applications.

Vacuum Dyson (talk) 16:54, 29 November 2017 (UTC)Reply


Good things: The features were summarized, making readers easy to understand.

Areas to improve: 1. The application part can be bucketed based on some/one criteria, such as industry or function, so as to easy for readers to have a big picture.

2. It might be better to write the pricing part in a paragraph instead of listing.

April.W (talk) 17:50, 29 November 2017 (UTC)Reply