User talk:Sophialester/sandbox
Latest comment: 8 years ago by Josefhoracek in topic The Lead
Sources
editI assume you're working on the drinking article. Your sources and citations look great. Go ahead and add the citations to the article. Josef Horáček (talk) 02:27, 21 February 2016 (UTC)
The Lead
editYour lead needs a little bit of work. First of all, you should provide some dates for the different periods you mention. Secondly, you need to maintain a neutral point of view. Right now, the lead reads like it was written by a fan of the team. I understand that this is a flaw of the whole article, but you must improve the article by writing an impartial lead. Also, the Rangers still play at the Madison Square Garden - your lead is a bit misleading on that. Finally, proofread for capitalization. Josef Horáček (talk) 04:35, 28 February 2016 (UTC)
- Your revision improved the lead a little, but you didn't address all the problems I mentioned in my previous comment. I saw you posted the lead in the article, and you'll notice that somebody rewrote it. I think the rewrite is good, so you should just leave it. Josef Horáček (talk) 20:01, 9 March 2016 (UTC)