User talk:Shrurobe/sandbox

Latest comment: 7 years ago by Shrurobe

You have a good start here. Your plan of attack following this draft is also clear. I would suggest looking at the Geekcorps website, if you have not. They have some info on Mali, as well as Lebanon. You can preface any reference to the website by saying something like: "According to the Geekcorps website XYZ." I have made some comments, in bold, in your article. Use those comments to examine other sentances in your articles. There are some other places where the construction of the sentence is a little strange. Clafjaco (talk) 19:15, 5 June 2017 (UTC)Reply

After clicking on the external link to Geekcorps' website, you can click on "Featured Programs" toward the bottom of the page and it brings up information about Mali, and also Lebanon. You could use the information from there to expand the "Major Projects" section of the article. It would be nice to have some more recent information about Geekcorps. Most of the sources of information are over 10 years old, but it is understandable that there might not be very many sources that are up to date on this topic. Another thing is that in multiple places you have geekcorps lower cased. As it is the name of a company, it should be capitalized every time. I went through and capitalized all of the Geekcorps plus added commas as needed. Overall, the information is clear and easy to understand. Besides some minor sentence structure, the article flows nicely and it is easy to follow. Nice work! Devinjck (talk) 03:48, 8 June 2017 (UTC)Reply

Thanks for the help! It is very much appreciated!Shrurobe (talk) 20:00, 8 June 2017 (UTC)Reply