User talk:Shahn27/sandbox
Hi! I can see that you are making progress on narrowing your topic. It is difficult to tell what you sources are because the links don't all work for me. Work on getting them in through the citation tool so that you can better show the article title and source. It also will help you more easily cross check with the current article to see whether you have duplicated something. About the topic selection, it seems like you will have a difficult time adding substantially to these topics. It is true that drug discovery doesn't have much about plants, but if you click the "medicinal plants" link, it takes you to a very well fleshed out article. Perhaps you should delve into the phytochemical page and determine if there is a section on a particular medicine that you can expand with some primary literature. Lethornton (talk) 02:51, 2 March 2018 (UTC)
Your ideas are shaping up nicely. Keep cross checking everything to make sure that you don't duplicate what is in the medicinal plant section. It looks like you have some useful things to say about plant products that are used for treating human diseases. Be careful to like to the descriptions of what the hormone does in the plant before you talk about its use in humans. Lethornton (talk) 20:48, 15 March 2018 (UTC)
Overall format: I think it is a pretty good article because you expended on the article's flaws, and used a majority of the same information. I think your article could be improved if you had links to the pages that you mentioned (like the FDA process, secondary metabolites, etc)
Citations: There is one sentence without citations which you may want to look into: "Recent research..."
Organization - I think your article is pretty organized but as you write more about the history versus the current research, you may want to look into separating the two by using a subheading or section. Also pictures for the two families would also illustrate their effects in the human body.
Spelling - I found no spelling errors, when you expand more make sure to get rid of the >>expand more<< tag you mentioned in the 3rd paragraph.
Tone - Tone is fine. You may want to refrain from using They, Those, or Research as starting words for your sentences because it become repetitious.
Content - Content is great, I think it definitely improves upon the article which is expanded upon. Nadkars1 (talk) 01:07, 28 March 2018 (UTC)
Instructor notes: You are making good progress in getting scientific information into this section. You need to be careful not to overlap with the medicinal plant page. You could add more clarity with section headings that show how you are linking plant products to specific human problems. You need a clear intro section that sets up all the discoveries that you want to talk about. You still need some more primary literature. The reference papers are important to explain background, but I want to see you explaining more science that relates to the topic. I can see that you are making improvements based on peer comments, so keep polishing. Lethornton (talk) 17:01, 13 April 2018 (UTC)