Reczekgl
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editHello, Reczekgl, and welcome to Wikipedia! My name is Shalor and I work with the Wiki Education Foundation; I help support students who are editing as part of a class assignment.
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If you have any questions, please don't hesitate to contact me on my talk page. Shalor (Wiki Ed) (talk) 17:20, 14 February 2018 (UTC)
You have an overdue training assignment.
editPlease complete the assigned training modules. --Eejoyce66 (talk) 20:29, 22 March 2018 (UTC)
Peer Review
editHi Grace! It's Georgia.
I thought I'd just list any minor edits/suggestions I have here. :) Feel free to do the same in my talk page.
1. You might want to add in some more citations. They don't necessarily need to be different sources, but I can't always find where you're getting your information. Ex: "Theophanu was not the blue-blood or purple-born princess the Ottonians would have preferred; in fact, as the Saxon chronicler Bishop Thietmar of Merseburg, writes, the Ottonian preference was Anna Porphyrogenita, a daughter of late Emperor Romanos II."
2. I'd do another grammar read through -- I found a number of run on sentences. Nothing that makes it unreadable, but it might clearer if you broke them up. The last sentence of the marriage section is slightly confusing. I might simplify it a little bit to make it more clear that it's Otto's need for an heir sealed the deal on the marriage.
Other than that, it looks really solid. You do a very good job of remaining neutral and your prose seem to be solid to me. :) It's clear and academic, but not so much so that it's unreadable. If you have a chance, you might ask the talk page is you can remove the banners saying that there are not any citations, since you've fixed that. Armitagegr (talk) 21:39, 1 May 2018 (UTC)