User talk:Pthomas4/sandbox

Latest comment: 4 years ago by Elysia (Wiki Ed) in topic Feedback

Feedback edit

Hi Pthomas4, here are some thoughts about your sandbox:

  • For biographies, it is customary to include birth and death dates in the first sentence. So you would have Jane Sharp (c. 1641 – unknown) was a ...
  • Wikipedia section titles are written in "sentence case" not "title case", meaning that just the first word and any proper nouns are capitalized. So instead of a section "Early Life and Education", you would have "Early life and education"
  • In general, all content on Wikipedia should be referenced. If consecutive sentences come from the same source, the citation can be added once at the end of the consecutive sentences rather than duplicated at the end of each sentence. In that vein, no paragraph should end without a citation, and no paragraphs should lack citations. I see several paragraphs that end without citations, which is a red flag. Where does this content come from? How will the reader know it's verifiable?
  • For this sentence, I would make it the connection more explicit: Sharp may have been Puritan, which would account for her ability to read and write Maybe add in a sentence (or phrase in parentheses at the end) about the difference in viewpoints on education women among these religious groups?
  • Looks like some of your references have date format errors (see the red text in the references at the bottom of the page? To fix this, go into edit mode, click the in-text citation, and if the popup box has Check date values in:, then click "edit" in the popup box. The citation formatting prefers formatting like 22 May 2020 or May 22, 2020. It gets confused by 2020-05. Have either MDY, DMY, or only year to avoid the date errors. Once corrected, click "apply changes"
  • You did a great job of adding links to other Wikipedia articles so that the reader can explore related content.

Really nicely done overall! If you believe the last two sections don't need much work, then feel free to leave them be and focus on the rest of the article. Let me know if you have questions about any of this feedback. Elysia (Wiki Ed) (talk) 18:08, 22 May 2020 (UTC)Reply

Thank you for your feedback, Elysa! I really appreciate your guidance. I have two questions re: referencing content. 1. In the "Organization" section, should I cite each subsection? They're all coming from the title page of the Midwives Book. 2. The remaining paragraphs of "Personal Beliefs," "Other manuals" and "Impact" are not mine. Should I add citations to these sections? Thanks in advance! Pthomas4 (talk) 15:44, 26 May 2020 (UTC)Reply

Pthomas4, I think it's fine to cite the organization section once at the bottom, as you're already doing. If you have access to sources that verify uncited content, it would improve the article to add those citations! Elysia (Wiki Ed) (talk) 16:21, 26 May 2020 (UTC)Reply