Poshycat
Joined 8 June 2008
Latest comment: 14 years ago by Zuchinni one in topic Gaza aid shipment
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Gaza aid shipment
editHi Poshycat! I would like to suggest a change to your recent edit: http://en.wikipedia.org/w/index.php?title=Gaza_flotilla_raid&diff=365759878&oldid=365759779
There has been an ongoing discussion to try and keep a NPOV in the lead. The change you made, when you added the good NY Times articles, seemed to accidentally make it less neutral.
I suggest you consider changing "were slain by Israeli forces" to "were killed by Israeli forces". Since slain is not as neutral as killed.
Alternatively you could say: "Nine passengers died in a skirmish that followed commandos boarding the vessel"
Cheers,