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Hi Patdwyer, thanks for clarifying things on my Talk page. Thankyou for being open and explaining who you are (I should have guessed from your username) but the first thing I should point out is you have a conflict of interest, which is strongly discouraged here. You will need to pay extra attention to creating a neutral, balanced article.
The article needs to be cited to reliable sources (e.g. journalistic standard with editorial control) that are independent of the subject. There are a couple of good, lengthy source about Mosher's book (and photography). There are also several reputable, lengthy articles about his recent marriage tour. I think he meets Wikipedia's notability criteria.
The problems are the very long lists of name-dropping, which are probably unnecessary - by all means mention one or two, particularly if they are mentioned in the news sources.
I can go ahead and accept the article but you must be prepared for other editors (including me) to change it where we see problems or imbalance. This may include adding a 'Conflict of interest' tag to the article.
Finally, if you want to continue this discussion, do so here on your Talk page, or on the article's Talk page (when it is created).
All the best! Sionk (talk) 23:17, 19 July 2012 (UTC)Reply

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Sionk - thank you so much for your guidance here. I will continue to refine the article and get it even further up to scratch. I have pumped in a couple more citations and I will study up on put more, reputable sources as we grow this article and I will keep it balanced I promise. Also I deleted a bag of celeb names from the article to cut back on the name dropping.

Next Month our movie premiers so there will be more stuff written about our work for Marriage Equality.

Thanks again and be talkin to ya right here :)

All best Patdwyer4 (talk) 01:46, 20 July 2012 (UTC)Reply

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