User talk:Morganrebeccalittle/sandbox

Latest comment: 5 years ago by Kaylalouwill

To further improve your article, you may want to include an introduction of Ida Wells so readers can better understand how influential Wells is in the women's movement. I like the way you organized your article, however, you might also want to make sure that the information written under a certain section ties back to the section topic. You also may want to add an introduction about the Women's suffrage movement in the beginning of the article to give a bit of historical context and then introduce the Alpha Suffrage Club.

Nancylim511 (talk) 05:28, 22 March 2019 (UTC)Nancy LimReply

So far, you have a lot of great stuff and a lot of great potential! I would say though, that some of your sentences and transitions read a little bit choppily, so I would try and work on the sentence flow. Also, I think, like Nancy said above, that it would be beneficial to expand on Ida B. Well's contribution, as well as adding in information about other influencers. Finally, I think you could use more information about the parade (which I'm sure you planned on doing anyways), more on the exclusion of NAWSA, etc... You have a pretty good amount of sources, but I think the more the better! SO far though, it is great!

Kaylalouwill (talk) 05:04, 24 March 2019 (UTC)Kayla WilliamsReply