User talk:Merongirma20/sandbox

Latest comment: 8 years ago by Jparcoeur in topic your critique

this article is a good introductory article for Epithelioid cell. some things that might improve this article are; adding more references, on this topic and maybe a picture or two for visual understanding. More information on the Epithelioid cells, such as function and less of description of the cell. The first sentence i felt was a little confusing for defining what Epithelioid cells are, and more not so common words were used within the definition that can be confusing. May if having that term is important, then a good definition of the term will help clear up the articles flow. The article was bias free which great, and all the information stated was relevant to the topic. it did feel like some things were more stressed than others. citation link does work, great. overall this is a good introductory article but just needs more information on Epithelioid cells

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I think you are right on all counts. The article mostly needs to be translated into a lower level of language for more general readers. The author seems to be a specialist defining these cells interms of their cell types that the general reader probably does not know as well. I would start with a more general introduction going into the family of cell types these are associated with. Images would also really help. The lack of citations is criminal so that has to be addressed. Overall, you are onto a good article where you can make a difference. Jparcoeur (talk) 18:43, 1 November 2015 (UTC)Reply