Megan Osterhaus
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Hello, Megan Osterhaus, and welcome to Wikipedia! My name is Shalor and I work with the Wiki Education Foundation; I help support students who are editing as part of a class assignment.
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If you have any questions, please don't hesitate to contact me on my talk page. Shalor (Wiki Ed) (talk) 20:45, 28 November 2018 (UTC)
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Hi, here are my notes:
Make sure that you avoid slang or euphemisms, as these may not always be clear to all readers as there may be some who are ESL or otherwise unfamiliar with the term. I'm specifically thinking of things such as the phrase "back down" since this is a little casual. It's also something that carries with it a certain amount of inherent emotions and intent, as the phrase gives off the intention that the entity that backs down is the one who is hostile. Even if this would be true, it's not really a neutral term and as such can be seen as a bit biased, even if no bias was intended. Instead of saying "forced to back down", it would be more neutral to write something like "dropped their suit" or something like that. Also avoid phrases like " famous" since that can be subjective to the reader - what's famous to one may be obscure to another.
Other than that, just make sure to review the material to ensure that everything is neutrally written, properly sourced, and that it isn't going to repeat content that isn't already in the article. If you're going to replace anything in the article, double check to make sure that you're not removing something that has better sourcing or the like. (Offhand your sourcing looks to be on point, though.) Shalor (Wiki Ed) (talk) 15:15, 3 December 2018 (UTC)