Mandy573
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editHow are you liking this class? Guyana65 (talk) 15:03, 5 October 2015 (UTC)
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editHello, Mandy573, and welcome to Wikipedia! My name is Ian and I work with the Wiki Education Foundation; I help support students who are editing as part of a class assignment.
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If you have any questions, please don't hesitate to contact me on my talk page. Ian (Wiki Ed) (talk) 20:21, 9 November 2015 (UTC)
Peer Review 1: wild-eidolon
editFirst off, your contribution to the Promotion (marketing) article seems to be really useful and an important aspect of marketing, so it's great that you're making it in the first place. Great idea to organize it by traditional and digital media, although you may want to consider elaborating on the "traditional media" portion a bit more, or be very careful when uploading your edits to the article.
Regarding the "digital media" section, it's well organized and very well-written. Definitely an appropriate tone and reading level (for lack of a better term) for the average Wiki reader, which is probably the most important part of P3. Great use of sources as well!
One thing that I would recommend is elaborating on your personalized advertisements piece, perhaps by speaking a bit more about how algorithms can be used in social media sites to tailor advertising content to specific users based on searches, "liked" content, and repeated words/phrases in posts. It might even be a good idea to mention criticisms as well. Another idea would be to add in a paragraph about people's aversion to digital marketing through the development of browser plugins like Adblock. Maybe you could tie this into your discussion on how marketing teams are really focusing on keeping potential consumers engaged and interested in the advertising content rather than ignoring pop-ups.
On the whole, though, you have some really great info and nothing seems to be missing. Great job!
A few minor points:
- should internet be capitalized? Look into that, maybe.
- consider changing "Digital media [...] is a modern way of brands interacting with consumers..." to "Digital media [...] is a modern way for brants to interact with consumers..."
- in your third paragraph, your last sentence about the issues digital marketing may face seems a bit out of place. Consider moving it or giving it its own paragraph, if you think it deserves it.
P.S. Sorry I uploaded this on your user page first, I mistook it for your talk page. Whoops!
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editMajor Points
- Overall, a well thought out article that is an easy read and thoroughly explains and expands on the original short paragraph of "Digital media"
- Both the positives and negatives of digital media are mentioned several times, it might be useful to create smaller subsections of "Digital media drawbacks/negatives" and "Digital media benefits/positives"
Minor Points
- The third sentence in the second paragraph reads, "…local contexts and cross geographic borders…," while it should be "…local contexts and across geographic borders…"
- The last two sentences of the second-to-last paragraph can be combined into one sentence
- Several sentences might benefit from the addition of some commas, " mass communication that, through media technologies, allow" "the advertisements, following this data collection, is frequently positive"
Nice job!Kdemkiw (talk) 22:57, 18 November 2015 (UTC) — Preceding unsigned comment added by 129.10.9.103 (talk)