User talk:MadelineMadrid/sandbox/Antinous Farnese

Latest comment: 2 years ago by Kelchango

Some great additions to the article here! I have three critiques: more citations are needed; there's a sentence at the beginning where you talk about the "found place" which is a little clunky, not sure if you were trying to paraphrase something but I would go with "site of discovery" or something similar; finally there is a line towards the end of a paragraph at the end of the article in which you bring up the erastes and eromenos and they don't seem to fit into any sentence, I would take a second look at that. But I look forward to reading your article when it's finished, it's looking good! Kelchango (talk) 18:14, 5 November 2021 (UTC)Reply