User talk:Kirapyne/sandbox

Great draft and great article choice! Since broadcast journalism has become the mainstream sources of information, I am surprised how short the original article is. The section you added helps provide crucial historical and background information pertaining to how broadcast journalism got its start. Before reading this, I have never heard of Edward Murrow and his influence on broadcast journalism. You managed to stay nonbiased and broke up your information into separate sections. Your sources are diverse and help paint a picture of how this medium was created. The only thing I would work on is minor grammatical issues and word choices. Other than that, I loved reading it! Camden Marcucci (talk) 15:06, 13 October 2016 (UTC)

Thanks for the feedback! I looked through my article and fixed some of my word choice and paid closer attention to my grammar! KiraPyne (talk) 21:35, 19 October 2016 (UTC)