Keanmc
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If you have any questions, please don't hesitate to contact me on my talk page. Ian (Wiki Ed) (talk) 19:11, 28 August 2020 (UTC)
Peer Review edit
Hi Keanmc! This is Sara. I am here to do your peer review. I have noticed you have found a really great source that you plan on adding to your article. When I was looking at your source and the current wiki page I noticed that your article had a lot of new information that was lacking in the current wiki page. Your source did a great job illustrating the impact of the Black Death on feudalistic society. The wiki article does not mention that so it could be something that you want to write about. I would mention that the power of the church significantly decreased due to the Black Death since so many deaths occurred and the Church could not explain them. This lead to indulgences as a way to buy yourself into Heaven. This corrupt power of indulgences is what ultimately lead to the Reformation. The current wiki article does not mention any of this and it is an extremely important moment in history, so the source you found is extremely beneficial. I would probably add this under the social subheading or you could potentially make a new subheading calling it political effects.
In relation to the actual wiki article, there are some improvements I noticed that you could potentially make when you are writing your article. There is some incorrect information in the lead regarding the spread of the Black Death. The lead states that the plague most likely originated in Asia, but there is a current CNN article that would say otherwise. https://edition.cnn.com/2019/11/23/asia/plague-china-history-intl-hnk-scli/index.html Here is the link for the article. The article states that the plague has been thought to have originated in Europe based on DNA evidence that scientists have discovered. You could change the lead to reflect this new information found in the CNN article, or try and find some more citations that would back up this claim. In addition the picture used in the lead could be improved. The lead picture is a picture of a map but it is sharing the same information as the map picture in the transmissions section. Maybe you could find another photo that would be able to add new information to the article instead of repeating information that is already shown. Here is a picture of a fresco that was made showing the Black Death that you could potentially use. "Fresco commemorating the Black Death - Ashby St. Ledgers" by Walwyn is licensed under CC BY-NC-SA 2.0 https://search.creativecommons.org/photos/bbd2356d-4aa1-4650-8520-adc507e0e0bd It is from creative commons so it is wiki approved. It is a picture made in the 16th century in a church that depicts the Black Death. You can see how brutal it must have been from the depiction of the skeleton and the tools.
Overall I think you have a lot to work with. The source you found is a great one to start out with and I think you could definitely help improve this article!