User talk:Juna Terano/Carbonate rock
Chengwu's peer review edit
1) Lead Section
For this sentence, “Importantly, when recrystallized carbonate rocks are metamorphosed, marble is created. Rare igneous carbonate rocks even exist as intrusive carbonatites and, even rarer, there exists volcanic carbonate lava.” In order to improve the clarity and comprehensiveness of this article, I suggest adding more details and explicit explanations about the topic. For example, it would be helpful to explain the meaning of "metamorphosed" or provide a relevant Wikipedia link to the term. Additionally, it would be beneficial to discuss the topic of metamorphosis and its relationship to carbonate rocks in a later section.
Furthermore, I noticed that the topics of "Paleoclimatology" and "additional significance" are not mentioned in the lead section, and it would be useful to add more information about these subjects. However, despite these minor points, I believe that the lead section is effective in clearly defining the importance of carbonate rocks. As someone who was unfamiliar with this topic prior to reading the article, I found the lead section to be a great introduction. With a little editing, the lead section could become even clearer and more informative.
2) Clear Structure
Overall, I found the first draft of this article to be well-organized and effective in introducing the topic of carbonate rocks to someone without prior knowledge. However, there are a few areas where the organization could be improved. For instance, in the "Paleoclimatology" section, it would be helpful to include a brief introduction about corals, sediments, and caves, similar to the approach used in the "Limestone" section. Additionally, it is not entirely clear why the sections on "Paleoclimatology" and "Additional significance" were introduced in the article, and it would be beneficial to address these topics in the lead section.
Despite these minor points, I believe that the article is generally well-organized. Overall, with some minor edits and improvements, the organization of the article could be even more effective in conveying information about carbonate rocks to a general audience.
3) Balanced Coverage
I believe that most sections in this article are necessary and appropriately balanced in length based on their importance to the subject of carbonate rocks. However, it would be helpful if the importance of the "Paleoclimatology" section could be explained in the lead section to further justify its inclusion in the article.
Overall, I did not find any section to be off-topic. The lead section presents a specific viewpoint regarding the formation of marble from recrystallized carbonate rocks and the existence of rare igneous carbonate rocks, but I was not fully convinced by this without a cited reference or explanation in a later section.
In summary, while the article is well-structured and informative, some improvements could be made in terms of further justifying the inclusion of certain sections and providing more thorough explanations and references to support key viewpoints.
4) Neutral Content
The sentence in the lead section that states "Importantly, when recrystallized carbonate rocks are metamorphosed, marble is created. Rare igneous carbonate rocks even exist as intrusive carbonatites and, even rarer, there exists volcanic carbonate lava" appears to lack neutrality and is not supported by any references. However, other than this sentence, I did not perceive any particular perspective from the author in the article, and it does not make claims on behalf of any particular group or individuals.
Overall, the article is well-balanced, although it may benefit from more detailed descriptions of alternative theories to provide a more comprehensive understanding of the subject.
5) Reliable Sources
The majority of statements in the article are supported by reliable sources, such as textbooks and journal articles. However, the last paragraph in the lead section doesn’t connect to any source, which should be improved. Source 4 relies on an MIT news article, which could benefit from finding related topics from scientific papers. Overall, the sources used in the article are appropriate and appear to be scientific articles. It may be helpful to include more Wikilinks throughout the article, especially in the lead sections, to provide additional context and information for readers.
6) Other things
While there are still many sections and details that need to be completed in the later work, the overall structure of the article appears to be sound. The figures included in the article are appropriate and have been selected thoughtfully. They have been particularly helpful in aiding my understanding of the topic.