Joshuahudnall

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If you have any questions, please don't hesitate to contact me on my talk page. Ian (Wiki Ed) (talk) 04:29, 17 February 2016 (UTC)

Outline of edits and expansion

Greetings All, My name is Joshua Hudnall and I am planning on modifying and expanding this article for my environmental studies class at CSU Sacramento. My family is from the Kern Valley, so this is a subject that is near and dear to me.

Here is my proposed outline for the future work:

I. Background

  A:  History of Isabella
  B:  History of Kern River
  C:  Resources
  D:  Planning Agreement
  E:  Design and Contracting

II: Construction

  A: Labor Force
  B: River Diversion
  C:  Groundworks and Rock Clearance
  D:  Architectural Style

III: Operation

  A:  Power Plant and distribution
  B:  Spillways
  C:  Lake and Tourism

IV: Environmental Impact

http://www.spk.usace.army.mil/Missions/CivilWorks/IsabellaDam.aspx http://bakersfieldnow.com/news/local/borel-hydroelectric-plant-could-close-part-of-latest-plans-for-isabella-dam-fix

Outline Feedback

Hi Joshua,

This looks like a pretty good outline to get you going. You should post it on the Isabella Dam talk page and begin developing your sections there.

Julianfulton (talk) 18:00, 17 March 2016 (UTC)

Peer Review

Hey Josh,

Overall, you've got a pretty good start to your paper so far. Lots of very organized factual information with good sources supporting it. The inclusion of the pictures in the seepage section really helps paint a picture of what is going on with the dam.

I like your use of highlighted words. When I re-learn how to do that again, I will have to include some of those in my article as well. Your background is very detailed and I enjoyed reading it. I would have liked to see some old-timey pictures of the construction of the dam back in the 1950s if you can find some. That will really help paint of picture for your readers of what the dam used to look like.

Some suggestions: I would suggest improving your lead section. This is the most important part of an article as it is the first thing people read and yours is a little small. I would add at least a paragraph summary of your topic to give people a sense of what they are going to read.

Hope this feedback helps,

Steph — Preceding unsigned comment added by Ss5243 (talk • contribs) 21:51, 14 April 2016 (UTC)

Using material from free sources

While US federal government work is not subject to copyright, and thus reusable within Wikipedia, when you use material verbatim from those sources, like you did here you need to label it appropriately to avoid plagiarism concerns. Please follow the instructions at Wikipedia:Plagiarism#Copying_material_from_free_sources. Ian (Wiki Ed) (talk) 22:29, 2 May 2016 (UTC)

Hi Ian. Thank you so much for pointing that out to me! It was never my intention to plagiarize that section. I had copied and pasted those selected sections and simply wanted to paraphrase and summarize them, as they were the ones most informative and really spelled it all out for me. I made sure to link to the original copy though, in case somebody who can understand the technical jargon of it.Joshuahudnall (talk)

May 2016

Thank you for your contributions. It seems that you may have added public domain content to one or more Wikipedia articles, such as Isabella Dam. You are welcome to import appropriate public domain content to articles, but in order to meet the Wikipedia guideline on plagiarism, such content must be fully attributed. This requires not only acknowledging the source, but acknowledging that the source is copied. There are several methods to do this described at Wikipedia:Plagiarism#Public-domain sources, including the usage of an attribution template. Please make sure that any public domain content you have already imported is fully attributed. Thank you. — Diannaa (talk) 21:31, 5 May 2016 (UTC)