Instructor feedback for article draft
editGood start in some aspects of the draft, but there is much room for improvement throughout. Here are a few suggestions as you are revising.
First, there needed to be some explanation of your objectives for adding content to the existing Wiki article. At first I was not sure what your article was, whether it was a new article or if you were adding content to an existing article. I'm not sure where you are adding these sections to the Parasocial Interaction article in terms of organizational flow. This needed to be clearly explained at the beginning.
The ethnocentrism section is interesting. I think you can expand a little more into how this connects to relational communication a bit more, especially in the context of parasocial relationships.
The section of brand personalities could benefit from a real life example. Also, I think this concept is tangential to relationships between humans. I think it is stretching the definition of "relationship" to think about how a person has a relationship with a brand or company. There is a lack of connection to relational communication theory and research in this section.
The credibility paragraph is well written with some insightful information, but similar to my comment above, it is fairly removed from relational communication.
As a holistic comment, I was expecting more content in this assignment. The guidelines for a new article are about 1,100 words and your content was about 350. There needs to be more direct connections and content about relational communication. You might have to get creative about content to add to the Parasocial Interaction article. Another option is to do some revising work of the existing content.
Remember to use proper APA style throughout, which includes using page numbers for direct quotes and accurate APA formatting of the citations in the references section.