User talk:Jlopez4758/sandbox

Latest comment: 5 years ago by Jlopez4758 in topic Polishing my work

Jlopez peer review

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There are some grammatical errors, the headings are not bold, underlined, or separated, and the reference links aren't connected to anything. I feel like that's a technical issue. Other than that, the intro is a good summary, the voice is neutral, there is an attempt at organization (again the separation was off) and the wording is easy to understand.

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Thanks for the response. I was particularly concerned about the neutral voice, so thanks for clearing that up with me. I will look over grammar as I move forward. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Jlopez4758 (talkcontribs) 04:27, 14 November 2018 (UTC)Reply

Jlopez peer review

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There are some grammatical errors, the headings are not bold, underlined, or separated, and the reference links aren't connected to anything. I feel like that's a technical issue. Other than that, the intro is a good summary, the voice is neutral, there is an attempt at organization (again the separation was off) and the wording is easy to understand. — Preceding unsigned comment added by MaximillianSearles (talkcontribs) 20:41, 6 November 2018 (UTC)Reply

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Thanks for these cosmetic reviews. I am planning on tightening up these issues as I go along. Organization is a big one with Wiki. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Jlopez4758 (talkcontribs) 04:28, 14 November 2018 (UTC)Reply

Jlopez4758 peer review

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You have a good foundation but some of your paragraphs do not flow due to incomplete sentences. I would suggest combining some of your shorter sentences into one longer sentence. Overall, the articles voice is neutral and covers a wide range of topics relevant to Agnodice. I enjoyed reading your intro, but I recommend adding a few more words about Gaius Julius Hyginus because the sentence is abrupt.Ingridxreyes (talk) 22:20, 7 November 2018 (UTC)Reply

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I appreciate your collegiality. This is the second time I've gotten feedback on neutrality. I'm glad for the reassurance. I'll check over the mentioned discrepancies. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Jlopez4758 (talkcontribs) 04:30, 14 November 2018 (UTC)Reply

Jlopez4758 peer review

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You have a great start to your article it was a very interesting. I was suggest shorting some sentences other then that it is good so far! I wish I knew enough about the topic to comment and further. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Asdf12356 (talkcontribs) 03:20, 9 November 2018 (UTC)Reply

Polishing my work

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To polish my work, I've been editing the content I've added and even added more of it directly into the Wikipedia page I'm working on. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Jlopez4758 (talkcontribs) 20:06, 30 November 2018 (UTC)Reply