User talk:Jameshu1/Husky Union Building

Hi, I'm starting to walk through articles and give everyone informal early feedback on how they're doing. You'll notice this is a little bit form-letter-ish but I hope it is still helpful!

I see you've made some changes and are starting to incorporate elements from our training, but there's still a ways to go with this article. If you're feeling stuck, please let me know how I can support you.

You don't need to mark an area as draft -- just work your additions right into the article text. Another area to improve as you revise is maintaining a "Neutral Point of View" about this topic. You'll find more ideas in this Wikipedia policy: WP:NPOV. The language sounds a little too much like an advertisement and not enough of an independent article. Part of the trouble is that you're pulling from a single source, and the organization's own website is in the business of making it sound good. There's more detail about this issue in this policy: [WP:OWNSITE] -- the site has a conflict of interest when it speaks about itself.

Kaylea Champion (talk) 06:34, 26 January 2022 (UTC)

Hi! I'm Miki. I finished the peer-review. Here's the link: Mikin83 (talk) 21:58, 27 January 2022 (UTC).

Hi Jameshu1, I have reviewed your draft. Overall you did a great job and I think there's some room that needs to be improved. Here's the link: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Jameshu1/Husky_Union_Building/Angelita_Cecilia_Peer_Review — Preceding unsigned comment added by Angelita Cecilia (talk • contribs) 06:12, 29 January 2022 (UTC)

Hello! I just added some peer review notes in your draft. I hope that my suggestions may help a little! Overall, great job and I am looking forward to see the final draft! Steph.tsaii (talk) 09:25, 29 January 2022 (UTC)

Hi @Jameshu1:

You are approved to go live. This looks great -- almost 2 quality classes in improvement!

As a reminder, here are our go-live steps:

1. Final read-through draft.
2. Check live article for changes. [History Tab]
3. Two browsers side by side, if you can. Code mode, not visual editor.
4. Paragraph by paragraph copy, leaving behind an explanatory edit summary after each chunk of changes.
5. Note on article talk page.
6. Note at the top of your sandbox version.
7. Celebrate!

Kaylea Champion (talk) 00:17, 8 February 2022 (UTC)