User talk:Groggler/sandbox
Peer Review edit
I think that the article had a very nice introduction and explained concepts really well. Very well done for the introduction. Some changes that I would suggest would be to include more citations within the text as well as include more information for the "Self-Flux" section. I would change the wording of the last sentence as I find that using the word "something" is too vague. I think the most important thing to improve on in this article, would be adding more references (as it semes to lean too heavily on the one reference), add more citations within the text, and to expand more in the "Self-Flux" section. Since the "Self-Flux" section is so small I am having a hard time reasoning why it is relevant, so I think it would be a good idea to expand. It also seems to be a lot smaller than the introduction which makes it seem less important. Overall the introduction was well done, and I would focus on editing the "Self-Flux" section, and adding more references and overall citations within the text.
MarissaGrosz (talk) 18:48, 8 November 2023 (UTC) Marissa