GentleHillRacer

Seabees in WWII

You tagged the article for "Tone" without fixing the issue. Some on Wikipedia call your edit "drive-by tagging" . Does the entire article have a tone issue for you or specific sections? Mcb133aco (talk) 00:23, 10 June 2024 (UTC)mcb133acoMcb133aco (talk) 00:23, 10 June 2024 (UTC)

Hello, and thank you for your comment.

I added the tone tag because parts of the article do not appear to follow the encyclopedic style. There are a few sections that, to me, read as overly dramatized, emphatic, or narrative, specifically the introduction and parts of History.

There are also issues with formatting, such as the excessive use of quotes (entire paragraphs within quotation marks, even when they do not appear to be copied verbatim from the source text), statements with only one quotation mark ("ingenuity and elbow grease became synonymous with Seabees. / “Pearl Harbour of the Caribbean), and acronyms not explicitly defined at their first use (CB, NCTC, CEC). These make the article unnecessarily difficult to understand, especially for someone without pre-existing knowledge on the topic.

The reason I did not fix this myself is that the article is outside my purview; I believe it would be better handled by someone with experience writing about historical/military topics using Wikipedia's voice. It's also a rather long article, and I simply did not have time to give it sufficient attention. In hindsight, perhaps I should have written a note on the talk page explaining my decision to tag the article, so for full disclosure, I may copy part of this message there.

Lastly, I am aware you’ve written most of the article, and I assure you I meant no offence by adding the tag. If another editor disagrees with my analysis, they are free to remove it.

I hope this clears things up. GentleHillRacer (talk) 02:29, 10 June 2024 (UTC)